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question: some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Answer:

Some people believe that rewarding students should be based on their examination results. In my view, students' improvements in their learning process should be the key factor when considering praising students.

On the one hand, there are two main reasons why it could be argued that the school's rewarding programmes should give a priority to praise students who have best academic outcomes. Firstly, the competitions among students in order to be recognised by teachers and their parents would be more intensive. Many students consider it a priority to earn titles at school. when prizes are limited, for example, they would know that they have to put more effort into study to overtake other classmates. Secondly, this kind of rewarding system also helps schools to classy special children who show motivations and abilities to specific subjects. They would be nurtured in more favourable study environment with different curricula and teaching methods.

However, I would argue that the idea of rewarding students according to their strides in study. The first reason is that every student has equal chances to be promoted with no matter of their current learning abilities. This would mean that prizes are now not stacked in favour of intelligent students, normal students could therefore get promotions if they show their advances in class. Furthermore, this form of recognition system follows the holistic principle of learning, which is to access he world of knowledge, not just to gain high scores. consequently, several common phenomena which occur when examinations come, including pressure, anxiety, and cheating would be reduced.

In conclusion, although rewarding students who have high scores is advantageous to some extent, it seems to me that it would be better to give encouragement to those who have improved their levels of academic study.