Please Check My Ielts Writing Task 2

I know my lexical resource is still poor and simple, so could you correct and upgrade my vocabulary and grammar as well? Many thanks.

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support to the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Answer

It is sometimes argued that parents are not induced taxes for state education when their children study at private schools. I completely disagree with this point of view.

Reducing taxes is not a simple work which give rise to a variety of serious consequences. In fact, there is not a tax which is induced directly to parents on state education. Because of this reason, it is difficult to calculate the specific amount of taxes that parents have to pay. For instance, government will need a great deal of professional staffs to run the new tax system. I believe that families who take their kids to study at private schools do not care about taxes because that is not a significant expense.

At the same time, paying tax also is a way that contribute to the operation of public services. Schools, hospital, police, to name just a few, are essential services for every citizens. Therefore, everyone should pay taxes to subsidize these activities for public benefit. For example, the amount of taxes induced by parents will be used to help children have an opportunity to go to school. It is obvious that government form taxes on state education to develop the national education system.

In conclusion, although children study at private school, their parent should still contribute a little amount of taxes to national education mechanism because of common benefit of the society.