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Wild animals have no place in 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer

Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on preserving wild animals because wild animals are no longer important in modern lives. I completely disagree with this view.

On the one hand, wild animals always play crucial role for the human community because they are dispensable parts of mother nature. Each specie is one important link in the food chain that includes the human. It is obvious that wild animals help to balance biodiversity and ecosystem of the Planet. For example, the disappearance of any specie will directly effect the existence of others and of course containing the human. Moreover, animals also bring significant value to society in many areas such as tourism, agriculture, health, etc. For example, wild animals attract the huge number of visitors who want to know and discover the wildlife.

At the same time, it is absurd to argue that the investment in protecting wild species is unnecessary. According to these enormous benefits expressed above, it is worthy to preserve wild animals. We can do it not only by financial methods but also by changing our lifestyle.There are projects that needs the vast amount of money to prevent the deforestation. Additionally, each person also is able to protect wild species through simple actions, for instance, ladies do not buy coats which are made from wild animal's skin or hair like snake, lion. Therefore, protecting animal is not wasteful and it is even easy to fulfill.

In conclusion, wild animals always are the essential partner of human thus we should make every effort to converse wild animals and their habitats.