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The pie chart gives information about different destinations that Anthony graduates chose after finishing degree course. The table compares the average salaries they got 5 years later among three types of work.

Overall, the majority of graduates had a full-time job after completing their degree course, and the smallest percentage of the total goes to people taking a part-time job and studying. After 5 years’ work, graduates working in the government sector accounted for the largest proportion of people who got the highest salary.

Regarding the pie chart, more than half of the total graduates got a full-time job, at 52%. The respective proportion of part-time employees and unemployees were much lower, at 15% and 12%. The figure for people taking postgraduate study was 8%, which was equal with the unknown group. Just 5% of graduates both had a part-time job and continued to study.

Looking at the table, after 5 years’ work, the number of people who worked in private companies and got salary ranged from 25$ to 49$, was 10%, which doubled the figures of freelance consultants and government sector group. However, a contradictory pattern can be seen at the most generous salary, over 100$. While the percentage of the government sector was half of the total, the figure for private companies was lowest, at 30%. 40% of freelance consultants got over 100$ after working 5 years.