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Topic: The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.The line graph compares requests for information in three different ways at a British tourist office in 5 months, from January to June.Overall, there was a sharp increase in the number of requests made in person and by telephone, yet an opposing trend for those made by letter/email. In addition, face-to-face requests, which were the lowest in January, had overtaken calls and hit the top spot at the end of the period.Regarding the requests by phone, with the highest data of about 900 in January, it showed a slight decrease to 800 in the next month, then significantly increased and reached 1600 in June. Starting at around 400 in January, the number of requests made in person increased significantly, reaching 1000 between March and April, which was equivalent to phone calls at the time. Then, from April to June, face-to-face requests surpassed the calling ones, with roughly 1900 in the last month.Finally, the requests by letter/email were nearly 800 at the beginning of the period before decreasing gradually to about 700 in the next two months. After that, it dropped sharply to nearly 400 in May and remained unchanged in the following month.

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The line graph compares requests for information (incorrect. It does not compare the requests, which would be what kind of information is in the request.) in three different ways (That is not good) at a British tourist office in (wrong word) 5 (Do not use digits for months, years and categories - these are not data values. Use words.) months, from January to June.

Overall, there was a sharp increase in the number (You did not mention "number" in the description of the graph.) of requests made in person (You did not mention "in person" in the description of the graph. This is poor cohesion and coherence.) and by telephone, yet an ~~opposing~~ trend for those made by letter/email. In addition, face-to-face requests, which were the lowest in January, had overtaken calls and hit the top spot at the end of the period.

Regarding the requests by phone, with the highest number ~~data~~ (wrong word. Data is the collection of values. A data point is one value.) of about 900 in January, it showed a slight decrease to 800 in the next month, then significantly increased and reached 1600 in June. Starting at around 400 in January, the number of requests made in person increased significantly, reaching 1000 between March and April, which was equal to the number of ~~equivalent~~ to phone calls at the time. Then, from April to June, face-to-face requests surpassed the calling ones, (wrong expression) with roughly 1900 in the last month.

Finally, the requests by letter/email were nearly 800 at the beginning of the period before decreasing gradually to about 700 in the next two months. After that, it dropped sharply to nearly 400 in May and remained unchanged in the following month.

To get the higher band scores, you need to do more than just copy values from the graph to the essay's body paragraphs. You have to do some primary-school arithmetic (addition, subtraction, division) and a bit of analysis. This writing is supposed to be at university level.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Here is a sample essay for you to study. Note that I add together the requests for January and June to show the relative contribution of each category.

The line graph compares the numbers of enquiries – in person, in writing by letter or email, and by telephone – that were sent to a UK tourist office each month during the first half of the year.

Overall, the total number in June was much higher than in January. This increase was attributed to the rise in in-person and telephone requests which more than offset the drop in the number received in writing.

In detail, the office had to handle 2,100 enquires in January and February, and a much larger volume, 3,900, in June. In January, most came in by telephone (900), followed by letter (780) and 410 from people coming into the office. This relative ranking was the same in February, but in-person visits were on an upwards trend that was to continue to June, when it reached 1,900, nearly a five-fold jump from January. Telephone enquiries ranged between 800 and 1,000 through April, and they also went up, reaching a maximum of 1,600 in June. Written requests dropped by 50% over the interval, ending at about 380, 10% of the total.

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