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CoSmO_hk Posted 19 years ago
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Please check my grammar

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00 00Most of the countries, it is essential that the government carry out to rebuild the city to progress in 00economy00 so that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope to preserve old building.02br
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00 00First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the international popular big city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, Which can make more attractive to tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and 00extend the 00job market. Moreover, lack of housing is the 00 serious problem, constructing big buildings can let more people to live in. Still further, visiting old buildings, tourist would think that 00 is very antiquated 00is not equally they had expected.02br
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00 00Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building. They should preserve some old buildings because many people grow up with it. Thus, many people have emotion with it. In addition, if they destroy all old buildings, you could not find any old building about 00 history. When you have got a child, you could not bring him to visit and show the old building where you often went to before or was named building. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist feel more special, which would give tourist more surprise.02br
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00 00In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government has a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry, it has not much people to object. However, at present, many people oppose to destroy the Star Ferry. I hope next time rebuilding that they should to object before finish the consultation. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if where has not many people visit.02br
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0Your basic grammar is poor. 01blockquote 01cite 10CoSmO_hk12cite 12br 12br 12br 12br 10 10Most of the countries, it is essential that the government carry out to rebuild the city to progress in 10economy10 so that many old buildings need to be destroyed. 12br 12br 10 10First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the international popular big city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, Which can make more attractive to tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and 10extend the 10job market.

  • 0Your basic grammar is poor.
  • 01blockquote 01cite 10CoSmO_hk12cite 12br 12br 12br 12br 10 10Most of the countries, it is essential that the government carry out to rebuild the city to progress in 10economy10 so that many old buildings need to be destroyed.
  • 12br 12br 10 10First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the international popular big city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, Which can make more attractive to tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and 10extend the 10job market.
  • Moreover, lack of housing is the 10 serious problem, constructing big buildings can let more people to live in.
  • 12br 12br 10 10Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building.
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0Your basic grammar is poor. I suggest you try simpler sentences.01blockquote
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0I have changed some sentences.I hope someone can correct my grammar.If you don't know the sentence meaning, you should highlight it, please.Thank you for your help.~"~02br
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00 00Like many governments in the world, the Hong Kong government would like to carry out city reform in order to boost 00the economy00, but to achieve this, many old building
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01. You need to break up your long sentences. Whenever your sentences get long, you make glaring errors. You can minimize your errors by keeping your sentences very very simple.02br
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002. You tend to leave nouns singular (e.g. building, tourist, etc.). 01blockquote
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00Thank you~02br
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00 00 00In most countries, it is essential that the government carries out policy of rebuilding the cities in order to progress in economy. This may induce that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope t
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0Your basic grammar is poor, though this version is a little better. 02br
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00You can keep your errors to a minimum by paying attention to your singulars/plurals (tourist01b00s, 02b00building01b00s02b00, a HK person, etc.) subject/verb agreements (I see, she see01b00s02b00), and articles (01u00
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