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School plays a more important role than the family in shaping one’s personality.

How many people believe that school plays a vital role in upbringing their children and forming their personalities? Yet, is it really prudent of parents to totally entrust their children to teachers?
Although the advantages of such a possibility seem to be tempting, they have to be considered alongside the drawbacks.
One argument in favour of school upbringing is that it is at school where children learn to socialize. Interaction with other children teaches them values which are useful in building character. It is needless to say that social skills are vitally important in personality development.
An additional argument in support of school is that young people are exposed to a wide variety of subjects. Thus, they are likely to develop more specialized knowledge at school. It is believed that parents do not always have the breadth or depth of knowledge that the combined resources of a school can provide.
What is more, the average child spends as many as eight hours a day in school. That means that a third of a child’s day is spent being exposed to the influences of school. That is to say, while a child is attentive, he/she is more receptive to outside influences. Evidently, time spent outside school has a great deal of emphasis placed on relaxation, which plays a less important role in forming character.
On the other hand, most children have a closer relationship with their parents than with their teachers. The distance between teachers and students is so great that it doesn’t allow more than a superficial influence. Because of the closer bond between parents and children, teachers are less likely to be used as role models.
Furthermore, children usually spend five years of their lives at home by the time they ever go to school. Some argue that the personality is so fully formed before the child goes to school that what they learn there make little difference to character. It is generally believed that negative personality traits are already established before school.
Moreover, a child has usually spent 24 hours of every day under their parents’ influence the comparatively short time they spend and school is of less significance.
In addition to this, so much of the school day is devoted to competition and preparation for examinations that there’s little time left for personality development. School children become obsessed with getting higher marks. In this way, antagonism can be encouraged and cooperation discouraged. Most children face with rote learning, which is time consuming and of little practical use outside school.
Al things considered, it can be concluded that school plays a certain role in forming a child’s personality but in no way a greater one than the family does. Should parents then fall the education and upbringing of their children on teachers’ shoulders?