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The music industry is more developing and now it releases many types of music in the world. In this essay, I will present reasons why music takes important role in modern life and in my opinion, traditional music of a country more important and should it be preserved than international music that is useful to a society
There are two good explanations why music is necessary.
First, listening to music is one of the most effective recreational activities to relieve stress and keep the mood in good condition after busy working days. Second, listening to instrumental music and symphony is a good method to concentrate and can also sing deep sleep. Besides, television and film companies use the music in their movies called open source track. Music can control the emotions of the audience, the film may not be special but with OST, the film is more meaningful and attractive.
There are some possible reasons why traditional music should be protected. First of all, modern music is derived from traditional music and this is an innovation in the field of music. For example, 90's rural music in the United States is very famous but until the twentieth century, some musicians created pop music, ballads and many modern music. Secondly, it includes history stories, cultures and specific language of a country. It is true that Quoc Ca is the most important tradition music of a country, which tells us about Vietnam wars, victory and independence. From primary to high school students have to sing this traditional song for keeping country's history. As the result, preserving traditional music like protecting country's heritage
In conclusion, with teenagers tradition music is old-fashioned and boring and it is just suitable for elderly. Thus, tradition music should be preserved