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Question:The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005. Answer:The provided line graph illustrates changes in car ownership in the UK over a period of thirty years starting from 1975.Overall, it is evident that while the proportion of people who owned two cars and three cars increased, the opposite was true for the percentage of no-car ownerships. Additionally, the figure for owners of one car was the highest during the research period.In the year 1975, the number of people who possess one car stood at about 45%, in comparison with nearly 46% for that of no-car owners. Then these figures witnessed a sharp decline to around 37% and 25% respectively over the next ten years, before the former tended to bounce back to the same figure of 1975 while the latter experienced a minimal decrease of 4% over the last 20 years of the research period.Although the number of citizens who own two cars and three cars stood at just approximately 6% and 4% respectively in the first year of the given period, they both maintained a stable rise up to 19% and 9% in the same order till the end. However, the first ten years saw a significant increase of about 8% in the quantity of two-car owners as opposed to only 2% that of three-car owners.

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The ~~provided~~ line graph illustrates (not a good word choice. Read my advice.) changes in car ownership (that does not accurately tell the examiner what is on this graph.) in the UK over a period of thirty years starting from 1975. (You have not fully described the graph. What is plotted? How many curves are there? What is measured? Is it household ownership or individual ownership?

I think this task was not taken from an authentic source. The data has some significant issues, and is atypical for those on Cambridge exams.

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Model paragraphs

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The line graph shows the percentage of households in the UK who own a certain number of cars (no car, one car, two cars, and three cars) between 1975 and 2005.

2.

The line graph depicts the patterns of changing car ownership in the UK between 1975 and 2005. In particular, there are four curves: the percentages of households who have no car, one, two and three cars.

Overall, ~~it is evident that~~ (unnecessary words.) while the proportion (You have not said that this is on the graph.) of people who owned two cars and three cars increased, the opposite was true for the percentage of no-car ownerships. Additionally, the figure (wrong word) for owners of one car was the highest during the ~~research~~ (The instructions do not mention any research. Do not add extra ideas.) period.

Example "overall"

Overall, in 1975, 90% of British families owned at most a single car; about half of them had no car at all. Car ownership increased substantially over this thirty-year period, so that in 2005, less than a quarter were without a car. That was slightly less than the percentage of families who possessed two or three cars.

In the year 1975, the number (Wrong word. This is a contradiction to your earlier description. A number would be 23,574 or 342,985.) of people who possess one car stood at about 45%, in comparison with nearly 46% for those who did not own car. ~~that of no-car owners~~. (incorrect. e.g. I don't own a no-car. Then ~~these figures witnessed~~ (wrong words. Read my advice.) both of them declined ~~a sharp decline~~ to around 37% and 25% respectively over the next ten years, before the former returned to the same value as in 1975. tended (This is subjective. You are looking at actual data. There is no "tend" or "maybe." Describe exactly what you see. ) to ~~bounce back to the same figure of 1975~~ while the latter experienced (wrong word) a minimal decrease of 4% over the last 20 years of the ~~research~~ period.

Although the number (wrong word) ~~of citizens who own~~ owning either two or ~~cars and~~ three cars stood at ~~just~~ approximately 6% and 4% respectively in 1975 ~~the first year of the given period~~, they both maintained a ~~stable~~ (wrong word) steady rise up to 19% and 9% in 2005. ~~in the same order till the end~~. However, the first ten years saw (wrong word) a significant increase of about 8% in the quantity (wrong word) of ~~two-car~~ owners of two cars as opposed to only 2% that of ~~three-car~~ owners of three cars.

Example essay: (190 words)

The line graph plots the percentage of households in the UK who owned a certain number of cars (no car, one car, two cars, and three cars) between 1975 and 2005.

Overall, in 1975, 90% of British families owned at most a single car, about half of having no car at all. Car ownership increased substantially over this thirty-year period, so that in 2005, less than a quarter were without a car. That was slightly less than the percentage of families who possessed either two or three cars.

In detail, the proportion of households with more than one car went up. In the case of two-car families, it rose from 7% to 17%, a 70% gain, and the proportion of three-car families more than doubled from 4% to 9%. The relative change in ownership was most dramatic in the first ten years, 1975 to 1985, when the proportion who had no car fell by nearly a half, from 44 to 25% and those with two cars doubled from 7 to 14%. The percentage unaccounted for on the graph was greatest in 1985, at more than 20%.

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