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Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Everything has two sides, and financial education in school is not an exception. Today’s is very difficult to learn how to survive and spend enough money on necessity things with small budget.
On one side, children definitely have to learn how to save money and organize their financial living. It is not easy give a answer on question “How learn young people to survive?”, probably more difficult is explanation “Where to live them about money?”. Some people agree that school is best solution while others have opinion that parents must take control in their hands.
However, everywhere around is constant calling to buy something what is on discount only few days. No one ask do we really need it. Sellers have only one aim, it is “how to aim consumer to buy things”. Not only child’s, also adolescent must think smart and decide what they need and what will be useful for them. When decide what to buy, and then they can go to market or store to leave money.
On the other side, school system is currently overloaded. Insert some serious subject like financial education is not easy job. Education about money management is not only school problem. Parents have lead function in explanation how world looks like. They must advise children about difficulties and troubles with money spending.
In conclusion, I vote for financial education in school system. Government or other responsible institution have to change educational system and find place to insert such as important subject like this above-mentioned.
Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Everything has two sides, and financial education in school is not an exception. Today’s is very difficult to learn how to survive and spend enough money on necessity things with small budget.
On one side, children definitely have to learn how to save money and organize their financial living. It is not easy give a answer on question “How learn young people to survive?”, probably more difficult is explanation “Where to live them about money?”. Some people agree that school is best solution while others have opinion that parents must take control in their hands.
However, everywhere around is constant calling to buy something what is on discount only few days. No one ask do we really need it. Sellers have only one aim, it is “how to aim consumer to buy things”. Not only child’s, also adolescent must think smart and decide what they need and what will be useful for them. When decide what to buy, and then they can go to market or store to leave money.
On the other side, school system is currently overloaded. Insert some serious subject like financial education is not easy job. Education about money management is not only school problem. Parents have lead function in explanation how world looks like. They must advise children about difficulties and troubles with money spending.
In conclusion, I vote for financial education in school system. Government or other responsible institution have to change educational system and find place to insert such as important subject like this above-mentioned.
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Well (sigh). I was working on your paper, making changes and whatnot. Unfortunately, I pressed the backspace button and it took me to the previous page when I lost progress.
- Well (sigh).
- I was working on your paper, making changes and whatnot.
- Unfortunately, I pressed the backspace button and it took me to the previous page when I lost progress.
- " That paragraph and the following need to be reworded because they need a lot of work.
- Other than that, I made small/simple corrections.
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Well (sigh). I was working on your paper, making changes and whatnot. Unfortunately, I pressed the backspace button and it took me to the previous page when I lost progress.
I don't have time right now to start all over again, but you did well until the "However, everywhere around..." That paragraph and the following need to be reworded because they need a lot of work. Other than that, I
I don't have time right now to start all over again, but you did well until the "However, everywhere around..." That paragraph and the following need to be reworded because they need a lot of work. Other than that, I
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