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You missed writing "to" before 'be', Isn't is? or it's correct that way too?
Essay:
With recent advances in technology, smart devices are becoming increasingly common, and almost everyone these days has at least one such gadget. In spite of their widespread use and applications, some people think that technological devices such as smartphones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. I disagree with that view without denying the existence of some disadvantages.
The disadvantages can be summarized by two words – 'misuse' and 'overuse'.[ 1]
Misuse is represented by wrong practices that people do which might cause some damages to them including using their smartphones while being connected to the chargers. Opening links that come from unknown sources which might bring viruses to their devices.
Furthermore, some people are addicted to their these devices and spend too much time on them. For example, they play video games, browse social networks, or watch movies for hours, and that affect their eyes, health and social communication. Instead of blaming technology, they need to learn time management to be able to control how much time they spend on such activities.
Nevertheless, smart devices [ 2] have numerous advantages. First, they play a significant role in education making knowledge resources and books available for everyone at any time and easier to find or to buy. Furthermore, with modern technology, classes need not be disrupted in emergency cases such as floods, extreme weather or pandemics. For instance, during COVID-19, online education is possible with the use of certain apps on smart devices. Therefore, students can still attend classes and the educational process can continue. In addition, modern communication devices have made online shopping, learning, using apps and working from home possible.
In conclusion, technological devices bring more advantages than disadvantages when they are used correctly.[ 3]
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With recent advances in technology, smart devices are becoming increasingly common, and almost everyone these days has at least one such gadget. In spite of their widespread use and applications, some people think that technological devices such as smartphones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. I disagree with that view without denying the existence of some disadvantages.
- With recent advances in technology, smart devices are becoming increasingly common, and almost everyone these days has at least one such gadget.
- In spite of their widespread use and applications, some people think that technological devices such as smartphones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages.
- I disagree with that view without denying the existence of some disadvantages.
- The disadvantages can be summarized by two words – 'misuse' and 'overuse'.
- Misuse is represented by accessing inappropriate content or using those devices for illegal activities.
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With recent advances in technology, smart devices are becoming increasingly common, and almost everyone these days has at least one such gadget. In spite of their widespread use and applications, some people think that technological devices such as smartphones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. I disagree with that view without denying the existence of some di
0MoonriseYou missed writing "to" before 'be', didn't you?Isn't is?Orit'sis it correct that way too?
No, I did not make a mistake. It's correct as it is. Do not add "to".
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