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Topic: the graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.My essay:The line graphs give information about the number of visitors in 4 different countries from 1980 to 2015. Two countries show an increase in the number of visitors (Egyptian and National Tokyo Museum), while Hermitage's visitors are the same and National Museum of Anthropology has a slowly drop.The first significant graph is for Egyptian Museum. It was the most popular over the thirty-five year period by almost 9 million visitors in 2015. Its visitors were about a little under 8 million in 1980. Its visitors the same Tokyo Museum's in 2015, but the population of Tokyo museum's visitors had a big rising trend, about 5 million visitors between 1980 and 2015.The least number of visitors is for National Museum of Anthropology in 2015. Its visitors population is just over 2 million. It has a slowly drop in these years, from just over 4 million in 1980 to around 2 million in 2015. What is more, Hermitage's visitors remained about the same during this period. Between 1980 and 2000, the number of its visitors decreased from 4 million to a little over 3 million and then rose to around 4 million again in 2015.

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The line graphs (There is only one graph.) give information about (Vague, unclear. Be exact) the number of visitors in 4 (use words, not numerals for small numbers) different countries (That is not the subject of the graph. What countries are these tourists visiting? Vietnam? China? Nigeria? Columbia?) from 1980 to 2015.

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Paragraph 1: Describe all aspects of the figure (map, table, chart or graph.) Do not mention any data values.

Tell the reader how many figures, what kind of figures, the subject matter, the geographical location, time period, units of measure, and the number and names of any categories.

Write 1-3 sentences.

Paragraph 2: Describe 2-3 significant observations in the data.

Write 1-3 sentences.

Paragraph 3: Describe some interesting details. Give data values and calculations you have made based on those values. Compare categories, time periods or anything else that stands out.

Write enough to make the minimum word count.

Two countries (What are the names of these countries? ) show an increase in the number of visitors (Egyptian and National Tokyo Museum), while Hermitage's visitors are the same and National Museum of Anthropology has a slowly (wrong form) drop.

The first significant graph (There is only one graph.) is for Egyptian Museum. It was the most popular over the thirty-five year period by (wrong word) almost 9 million (The units of measure do not say it is in millions. It there some other information that you did not provide? ) visitors in 2015. Its visitors were ~~about~~ a little under 8 million in 1980. Its visitors the same (ungrammatical) Tokyo Museum's in 2015, but the population (wrong word. The population of Tokyo is all the people living within the city limits ) of Tokyo museum's visitors had a ~~big~~ rising trend, about 5 million visitors between 1980 and 2015. (That means that the total of all the visitors for thirty-five years was 5 million. Where did you get that number? Did you add up 35 numbers for each year?)

The least number of visitors is for National Museum of Anthropology in 2015. Its visitors population (wrong word) is just over 2 million. It has a slowly drop in these years, from just over 4 million in 1980 to around 2 million in 2015. What is more, Hermitage's visitors remained about the same during this period. Between 1980 and 2000, the number of its visitors decreased from 4 million to a little over 3 million and then rose to around 4 million again in 2015.

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The line graph delineates data of number of tourists that went to four international museums over a period of 35 years

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The line graph illustrates the four international museums such as Louvre, Vatican museums, London Science museum and Shenzhen museum, in there several travellers were visited from 1980 to 2015.

Overall, it can be seen that the Louvre Museum was already famous for the highest number of visitors visited in 1980, while over the period, which was more populated in 2015. However, the drammatic changed in the Vatican museums and took an almost similar position of Louvre museum throughout period.

In 1980, the Louvre museum was accounted nearly 8 million people who visited there and took a first rank and then in 1995, visitors were soar by 9 millions after which decline some minimal numbers and agian spike at just under 10 millions in 2015. Moreover, the second rank of Vatican museum had approximately 5 millions visitor who visited in there and which extremely eminent with steady increased by several individuals who visited in there and which made a similar to Lauvre.

In 1980, the London Science museum and Shenzhen museum were quite popular as compare to others, but there were accounted by 4 millions of people travelled in both places, whereas the Shenzhen museum was overtook the London Science museum over 35 years. Although, the London Science museum was plummeted to almost 1.8 millions of visitor in 2015, the Shenzhen museum had long fluctuation and in 2015, there was no changed with 4 millions traveller.

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