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The bar chart shows the literacy rate by region and gender in 2011.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

My essay:

The shown chart is a graph of different region's literacy rate for both men and women in 2011 (green for men and violet for women).

The maximum rate belongs to Central Asia/Eastern Europe that is almost 100%. That means all people in these areas can read and write. Sub-Saharan Africa has the minimum rate. In comparison, the proportion of Sub-Saharan's literates to those of the largest rates is about four to ten, for women. and the difference in male literacy rate is just a third in these regions.

In four other areas, there is a difference between the number of literate women and men. The highest variance is in South and West Asia where 80% of men and about 60% of women can read and write. In these regions, there are three literate women for four littered men.

In general, in most areas, women's literacy percentage is less than that of men.

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The ~~shown~~ chart is a graph (Learn the names of the figures that you will encounter in this task: line graph, bar chart, and pie chart.) of different region's (wrong form) literacy rate for both men and women in 2011 (green for men and violet for women). (What are the regions?)

~~The maximum rate belongs to Central Asia/Eastern Europe that is almost 100%.~~ (People in Central Asia and Central/Eastern Europe have the highest rates, nearly 100% That means all people in these areas can read and write. Sub-Saharan Africa has the lowest ~~minimum~~ rate. (The minimum is zero. No area has the minimum.) In comparison, the proportion of Sub-Saharan's literates to those of the largest rates is about four to ten, for women. and the difference in male literacy rate is just a third in these regions.

I cannot understand this sentence. It is very poor English, and I can't find 40% or 33% anywhere on the bar graph..

In four other areas, there is a difference between the number of literate women and men. The highest variance (Wrong word. Variance is a statistical measure of the "spread" of data points from a mean or average value.) is in South and West Asia where 80% of men and about 60% of women can read and write. In these regions, there are three literate women for four littered (To litter is to throw trash on the street.) men.

In general, in most areas, women's literacy percentage is less than that of men. (This should be in the second paragraph.)

This is a rather difficult task. I regard Task 1 to be much more challenging than Task 2. Learn math vocabulary words to prepare for Task 1.

Model essay (first two paragraphs):

Paragraph 1: Describe all aspects of the figure, but do not write about the data itself.

Paragraph 2: Pick out 2 or 3 most important observations
Paragraph 3: Write about some specific details.

The bar graph depicts the literacy rates among men and women in seven different geographical areas of the world: Sub-Saharan Africa, South and West Africa, Arab states, Latin American and Caribbean, East Asia and Pacific, Central and Eastern Europe and Central Asia. The bars are ordered by literacy rate.

Overall, Central Asia has the highest literacy, but Central and Eastern Europe is a close second. Nearly 100% of the population is literate. In the next two areas, East Asia and Latin America, the male literacy rate is also close to 100%. In contrast, Africans have low literacy rates, with Sub-Saharan Africa in last place. Also, in all regions except the top two, the literacy rate is higher for males than for females.

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