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Hi ...Please I need you check my writing , thesis and topic statements..thanksTechnology is a knowledge of using tools and machines to do tasks more efficiently. No doubt, technology is increasingly important in the modern world. It is amazing how fast technology has been developed. Nearly every major advance was invented in the last century .  As result , our lives are different from our parents' lives. If comparing stories told by our  fathers about their childhood to those of ours, just one generation apart, a lot of differences would be seen. Stories told by our fathers were of their difficulties of lives .For instance , they lived their whole lives in the same village . They rarely went away from home .When they did ,they traveled on camels or horses. They lived in traditional houses made of mud, wood and chopped straw. They fetched water from wells. Cooking was done on an open fire and lightening was provided by oil lamps. Additionally, when someone was sick , his mother used to make remedies from plants and trees that grew in the area . Besides, the evening entertainment was to sit and listen to stories told by an older member of the family. On the other hand , our modern lives is quite different from theirs .First of all ,we live in civilized and modern cities. Second , we have got cars so that we can reach any place easily .Moreover , we can even travel from country to another by a bus, a plane or a ship. Water is easily delivered to our homes because of the invention of pipes and pumps. Nowadays , cooking can be done instantly with ovens, cookers and microwaves. When someone is sick now, his parents take him to the hospital where doctors use technology in taking care of him. The modern entertainment in our lives has many ways and shapes.  For example , there are televisions , video players , play stations , electronic games and more else.    In the final analysis ,  I can tell that technology has made our lives better. We can now have a better quality in many aspects of life . Remote controls, laptop computers and cellular phones, which our parents did not had ,  are just a few examples of how technology is able to make life easier and happier.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

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Technology is a knowledge of using tools and machines to do tasks more efficiently. No doubt, technology is increasingly important in the modern world. It is amazing how fast technology has been developed. Nearly every major advance was invented in the last century . As result , our lives are different from our parents' lives.
If comparing stories told by our fathers about their childhood to those of ours, just one generation apart, a lot of differences would be seen. Stories told by our fathers were of their difficulties of lives .For instance , they lived their whole lives in the same village . They rarely went away from home .When they did ,they traveled on camels or horses. They lived in traditional houses made of mud, wood and chopped straw. They fetched water from wells. Cooking was done on an open fire and lightening was provided by oil lamps. Additionally, when someone was sick , his mother used to make remedies from plants and trees that grew in the area . Besides, the evening entertainment was to sit and listen to stories told by an older member of the family.

On the other hand , our modern lives is quite different from theirs .First of all ,we live in civilized and modern cities. Second , we have got cars so that we can reach any place easily .Moreover , we can even travel from country to another by a bus, a plane or a ship. Water is easily delivered to our homes because of the invention of pipes and pumps. Nowadays , cooking can be done instantly with ovens, cookers and microwaves. When someone is sick now, his parents take him to the hospital where doctors use technology in taking care of him. The modern entertainment in our lives has many ways and shapes. For example , there are televisions , video players , play stations , electronic games and more else

In the final analysis , I can tell that technology has made our lives better. We can now have a better quality in many aspects of life . Remote controls, laptop computers and cellular phones, which our parents did not had , are just a few examples of how technology is able to make life easier and happier.

Toto.. · Answer

Hi..

I tried to fix the underlined problems .But I am not sure about the words written in red...

Please tell me how can I fix them.

Thank you.

Technology is the knowledge of using tools and machines to do tasks more efficiently. No doubt, technology is increasingly important in the modern world. It is amazing how fast technology has been developed. Nearly every major advance was invented in the last century . As result , our lives are different from our parents' lives.

If we compare stories told by our fathers about their childhood with ours, just one generation apart, a lot of differences would be seen. Stories told by our fathers were of their difficulties of lives .For instance , they lived their whole lives in the same village . They rarely went away from home .When they did ,they traveled on camels or horses. They lived in traditional houses made of mud, wood and chopped straw. They fetched water from wells. Cooking was done on an open fire and oil lamps were used to provide light. Additionally, when someone was sick , his mother used to make remedies from plants and trees that grew in the area .Moreover , the evening entertainment was to sit and listen to stories told by an older member of the family.

On the other hand , our modern lives are quite different from theirs .First of all ,we live in modern cities. Second , we got cars so that we can reach far places easily. Moreover , we can even travel from one country to another by bus, plane or ship. Water is easily delivered to our homes because of the invention of pipes and pumps. Nowadays , cooking can be done fast with ovens, cookers and microwaves. When someone is sick now, his parents take him to the hospital where doctors use technology in taking care of him. The modern entertainment in our lives has many different ways. For example , there are televisions , video players , play stations , electronic games etc..

In the final analysis , It is obvious that technology has made our lives better. We can now have a better quality in many aspects of life . Remote controls, laptop computers and cellular phones, which our parents had not got, are just a few examples of how technology is able to make life easier and happier.

Mister Micawber · Answer

how fast technology has developed.

Stories told by our fathers were of the difficulty of their lives

cooking can be done efficiently with ovens

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