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0   The lecturer supports many points in the reading, and it offers specific examples to illustrate them. The lecturer provides details about three kinds of points to maintain them: dangerous, costly and impractical space exploration.02br00     First of all, the reading states that the radiations are exposed to jeopadizes them health. The lecture illustrates this point with details; the radiation has huge risk on human body. As time goes by, it is going to be more difficult for human to recover.02br00      Second, the reading observes that it has been estimated that just one country's manned space program, that of the United States, will cost between $ 170 and $ 600 billion during the first two decades. The lecture explaines it as follows. Space exploration is accompanied by robotic work; the lecturer says that it is costly.02br00     Finally, the reading maintains that human beings are limited physically in term of how long they can endure the charges conditions. The lecturer gives the examples of food provided in space, which is need as necessity; there is no enough food and water to take to space. In addition, there is no oxygen to supply in space.02br00     In conclusion, the reading expresses the opinion that the space exploration is not conducted. The lecturer adds that it is dangerous, costly and impractical.0-

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01font01i00A good first draft, but you need to have a look again at some parts. First of all, you might want to look up the words "lecturer" and "reading". A lecturer is a person who stands up in front of a group and gives information. Unless you are commenting on an actual live lecture you have attended, you need to change this to writer/author or similar. "Reading" is usually used for a passage of a religious or classical text being read out to an audience. You probably mean article/text/report/essay or something similar.02i02font02br
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00 The 00lecturer00 supports 01i01font00[this means he agrees with someone else - wrong word?]02font02i00 many points in the reading, and it 01i01font00[he/she - this refers to the writer]02font02i00 offers specific examples to illustrate them. The lecturer00 00provides details00 about three kinds of points to maintain them00 01font00[argues there are three main areas of concern]02font00: 00dangerous, costly and impractical space exploration00. 01font01i00[these need to be nouns not adjectives e.g.02i00 danger, cost, and the impracticality of space exploration01i00]02br
02i02font00 First of all, the reading states 00that the radiations are exposed to00 jeopa01font00r02font00dizes 00them 00health 01font00[exposure to radiation jeopardizes health02font00]. The lecture illustrates this point with details 01i01font00[you said this already in your first paragraph]02font00;02i00 the radiation 00has00 01font00[poses]02font00 01font00a 02font00huge risk 00on00 01font00to the02font00 human body01i01font00 [this is the same as the first sentence in this paragraph]02font02i00. 00As time goes by, it is going to be more difficult for human to recover.01font00 02font01font01i00[02i00As time goes by 01i00usually02i00 01i00suggests change over many years - even over generations. Do you mean that in each successive generation humans in general will find it harder to recover from exposure to radiation, or that one person will find it progressively harder to recover from successive bouts of radiation exposure?]02i02font02br
00 Second, the reading 00observes00 01font01i00[a person observes, not a text. Use02i00 reports/states 01i00or similar]02i02font00 that it has been estimated that just one country's manned space program, that of the United States, 00will cost00 01i01font00[the US space program has already been running for more than 50 years - either this needs to be in the past tense, or you need to change 'during the first two decades']02font02i00 between $ 170 and $ 600 billion during the first two decades. The 00lecture00 01i01font00[wrong word]02font02i00 explain00e00s it as follows. 00Space exploration is accompanied by robotic work; the lecturer says that it is costly.00 01font01i00[What does robotic work mean? Work done by robots? Designing and building robots to go into space? I think you may mean something like:02i00 The author also points out that manned space expeditions include costly robotic data-collection equipment.]02font02br
00 Finally, the reading 00maintains00 01i01font00[a person maintains, not a text]02font02i00 that human beings are limited physically in term01font00s02font00 of how long they can endure the 00charges conditions01i01font00.[sorry, can't work out what you mean here]02font02i00 The lecturer gives the examples of food provided in space, which is 00need as necessity00 01font01i00[is a necessity]02i02font00;00 there is no01font00t 02font00enough food and water to take 01font00in02font00to space01i01font00 [what do you mean here? Why can't they just take enough with them?].02font02i00 In addition, there is no oxygen 00to 00supply in space 01i01font00[huh? Space ships take oxygen supplies with them - why does the author think there is any problem with this?02font02i00].02br
00 In conclusion, the reading expresses the opinion 01i01font00[only a person can express an opinion]02font02i00 that 00the00 01font00further02font00 space exploration 00is00 01font00should02font00 not 01font00be02font00 conducted. 00The lecturer adds that it is dangerous, costly and impractical00. 01i01font00[This is the same as your first paragraph: it's not an addition]02font02i0-

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