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Blew Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing
Please check my cv to correct mistakes
Hi, i will apply for a graduate(master) programme in a European country. Can you check my cv for mistakes and advices ?
xxx xxxxxxx
No:xxx,xxx, xxxx street, Xxx, Xxxx
Mobile Phone: +012345678 E-Mail: Email Removed
Education
B. Sc. Mechanical Engineering, September 2008 – Expected June 2012
xxx University, City, Country
Specialization Field: xxxx GPA: 3.12 out of 4.00
Honor List, Fall, 2010-2011; Spring, 2009-2010; Spring 2008-2009
High School Diploma, September 2004 - June 2008
xxxx High School
Branch: xxxx
Work Experience
Research and Development Intern, June 2011 – September 2011
R&D Fluid Dynamics Department, xxx Inc., City, Country
Designed cooker. Constructed and tested prototypes to analyze efficiencies of the cookers. Regulated and upgraded internal hot air flow and combustion gases of the cookers. Events resulted in two different patent application.
Research and Development Intern, June 2010 – July 2010
Engine Development Department, xxx Co., City, Country
Analyzed engine mapping, power curve, emission tests and measurement systems. Participated in calibrations of measurement and emission devices. Investigated and evulated price/performance ratios of different companies; attended and reported on department meetings.
Workshop Intern, May 2009 – June 2009
Student Internship Workshop, xxxx, City, Country
Worked with a team of 5 peers to perform manufacturing processes; machining, welding, casting.
Specialized Skills
Computer Skills and Competences:
Interests
Music
References
xxxx
yyyy
xxx xxxxxxx
No:xxx,xxx, xxxx street, Xxx, Xxxx
Mobile Phone: +012345678 E-Mail: Email Removed
Education
B. Sc. Mechanical Engineering, September 2008 – Expected June 2012
xxx University, City, Country
Specialization Field: xxxx GPA: 3.12 out of 4.00
Honor List, Fall, 2010-2011; Spring, 2009-2010; Spring 2008-2009
High School Diploma, September 2004 - June 2008
xxxx High School
Branch: xxxx
Work Experience
Research and Development Intern, June 2011 – September 2011
R&D Fluid Dynamics Department, xxx Inc., City, Country
Designed cooker. Constructed and tested prototypes to analyze efficiencies of the cookers. Regulated and upgraded internal hot air flow and combustion gases of the cookers. Events resulted in two different patent application.
Research and Development Intern, June 2010 – July 2010
Engine Development Department, xxx Co., City, Country
Analyzed engine mapping, power curve, emission tests and measurement systems. Participated in calibrations of measurement and emission devices. Investigated and evulated price/performance ratios of different companies; attended and reported on department meetings.
Workshop Intern, May 2009 – June 2009
Student Internship Workshop, xxxx, City, Country
Worked with a team of 5 peers to perform manufacturing processes; machining, welding, casting.
Specialized Skills
Computer Skills and Competences:
- Proficient in Microsoft OfficeTools (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Outlook Express);
- Good command of engineering softwares (AutoCAD, CATIA, SolidWorks, MATLAB, Mathcad, ABAQUS/CAE, ANSYS, Fluent, Gambit);
- Basic knowledge of programming (C, C++);
- xxx1 (Native)
- xxx2 (C2) (Toefl IBT: 112)
- xxx3 (A2)
Interests
Music
- Play guitar in blues rock, progressive rock bands.
- Arrange jam sessions with different guitarists.
- Travelled extensively in Europe and Northern Middle East.
- Development of interpersonal skills and understanding of and adaptability to other cultures.
References
xxxx
yyyy
Top answer
Hi, Blew. Hope you'll find this useful. The 4th line in your "Work experience" : The events resulted in two different patent application s .
- Hi, Blew.
- Hope you'll find this useful.
- The 4th line in your "Work experience" : The events resulted in two different patent application s .
- I think, you need to be more precise here, maybe that could sound like "patent for the cooker ".
- The 2nd line at Computer Skills...
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Hi, Blew.
Hope you'll find this useful.
The 4th line in your "Work experience" : The events resulted in two different patent applications. I think, you need to be more precise here, maybe that could sound like "patent for the cooker".
The 2nd line at Computer Skills... "Software" appears to be uncountable. (Or is this just a typo?)
I'd advis
Hope you'll find this useful.
The 4th line in your "Work experience" : The events resulted in two different patent applications. I think, you need to be more precise here, maybe that could sound like "patent for the cooker".
The 2nd line at Computer Skills... "Software" appears to be uncountable. (Or is this just a typo?)
I'd advis
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Thank you for your reply, Altynay.
You're right about that i need to be more precise but there is patent confidentiality because of investigation of application. Well, i dont want any trouble with the issue.
What do you mean "Software appears to be uncountable" ? Because, i give the specific list in paranthesis. Should i cut software and put the softwares' names which is in paranthes
You're right about that i need to be more precise but there is patent confidentiality because of investigation of application. Well, i dont want any trouble with the issue.
What do you mean "Software appears to be uncountable" ? Because, i give the specific list in paranthesis. Should i cut software and put the softwares' names which is in paranthes
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Regarding software, I just think it is not normally used in plural form "softwares" (to be honest, I checked this by Google and it returned only "software" results - singular form, at least at the 1st page). I daren't judge whether you should put the names into parenthesis or not.
As for Interests section, it contains all the needed information and seems to be correct. I thought it is uni
As for Interests section, it contains all the needed information and seems to be correct. I thought it is uni
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Ok. Now i got your point about software. And, well now i'm going to check some styles of CV and rearrange things. Thank you for your precious help. By the way, if anyone wants to help about the style or has some advices, please tell me about it.
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