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LauFR Posted 9 years ago
Letter Writing
Please check my cover letter
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to explain you why I have applied to the first year of your international programme in physiotherapy for the academic year 2017-2018.
First, I am really interested in getting a better understanding of the human body and health in general. As a matter of fact, as I love working out, I would like to learn more about all the different body systems that are involved while doing sports. I also wish to know how to prevent or treat injuries by using my hands and my knowledge about the human body.
Moreover, I enjoy being in contact with people, listening to them and advising them if they have any trouble. In fact, contributing to someone’s happiness makes me feel very pleased and useful. That is why I am also hoping to participate in humanitarian missions as a physiotherapist.
Furthermore, I like the fact that physiotherapy is a varied profession in constant evolution which requires you to know about different techniques and exercises, for example to ease pain or improve movement and strength.
What is more, you can choose to work in a hospital, a rehabilitation centre, or, as I plan to, work in private practice.
Besides, I think that your bachelor in physiotherapy fits me. Indeed, I really wish to study in English to be able to work abroad with people from all around the world.
In addition, I like the content of your courses mixing theory and practical education, and covering all the different aspects of the profession including care, management and innovation.
I also read in your brochure that, after graduation, you offer a traineeship at a company or organization in The Netherlands through the XXX Programme, which seems to represent a great opportunity.
Finally, studying in The Netherlands would benefit my professional life thanks to a high-quality education but also my private life. Indeed, living in a different country, meeting other people, and learning about Dutch culture would certainly be a rewarding experience.
Thank you for taking my application into consideration,
I look forward to hearing from you,
Yours faithfully,
I am writing this letter to explain you why I have applied to the first year of your international programme in physiotherapy for the academic year 2017-2018.
First, I am really interested in getting a better understanding of the human body and health in general. As a matter of fact, as I love working out, I would like to learn more about all the different body systems that are involved while doing sports. I also wish to know how to prevent or treat injuries by using my hands and my knowledge about the human body.
Moreover, I enjoy being in contact with people, listening to them and advising them if they have any trouble. In fact, contributing to someone’s happiness makes me feel very pleased and useful. That is why I am also hoping to participate in humanitarian missions as a physiotherapist.
Furthermore, I like the fact that physiotherapy is a varied profession in constant evolution which requires you to know about different techniques and exercises, for example to ease pain or improve movement and strength.
What is more, you can choose to work in a hospital, a rehabilitation centre, or, as I plan to, work in private practice.
Besides, I think that your bachelor in physiotherapy fits me. Indeed, I really wish to study in English to be able to work abroad with people from all around the world.
In addition, I like the content of your courses mixing theory and practical education, and covering all the different aspects of the profession including care, management and innovation.
I also read in your brochure that, after graduation, you offer a traineeship at a company or organization in The Netherlands through the XXX Programme, which seems to represent a great opportunity.
Finally, studying in The Netherlands would benefit my professional life thanks to a high-quality education but also my private life. Indeed, living in a different country, meeting other people, and learning about Dutch culture would certainly be a rewarding experience.
Thank you for taking my application into consideration,
I look forward to hearing from you,
Yours faithfully,
Top answer
It seems as if you have used every "in addition" transition word in the dictionary. That makes the tone of your essay quite tedious. There are no obvious grammatical errors.
- It seems as if you have used every "in addition" transition word in the dictionary.
- That makes the tone of your essay quite tedious.
- There are no obvious grammatical errors.
- However, the essay is rather mediocre.
- 99% of the people applying to this program probably do sports, want to learn something about physiotherapy and are attracted to the program for the obvious reasons.
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It seems as if you have used every "in addition" transition word in the dictionary. That makes the tone of your essay quite tedious.
There are no obvious grammatical errors. However, the essay is rather mediocre. 99% of the people applying to this program probably do sports, want to learn something about physiotherapy and are attracted to the program for the obvious reasons. What about you
There are no obvious grammatical errors. However, the essay is rather mediocre. 99% of the people applying to this program probably do sports, want to learn something about physiotherapy and are attracted to the program for the obvious reasons. What about you
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