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Ayubxon88 Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

Please check my cover letter!

I have been using this forum for about 2 month and never had a chance to ask your help. I wrote my own cover letter by using my knowledge that I took from this forum. Please check my letter and correct my mistakes. I would be delighted to receive your respond soon.

Truly,
Alex

COVER LETTER

Sinsung-dong Hana Apt 109-1305, DAEJEON

08 August, 2008
Dear Hiring Partner

I am writing in response to your recent advertisement for a new network manager. Because of my background in computer network, I am confident that I match your published profile. Please find my curriculum vitae for your consideration.

I studied Computer Science at Ehwa Women’s University, Korea. I have worked as a system administrator in Agency for Defense Development since 1997. I have worked as a Network Administrator over a 30 server and more than 3000 users. Also, I recently worked as a security manager to integrate security systems and network infrastructure.. Also I have managed security systems like Firewall, IDS for the past 7 years. My experience in the area of Unix system, Windows Systems, networks, and Security Systems are cooperated each other. Those experience allowed me to design very large campus network and I can integrate many servers and security systems with network infrastructure seemlessly. I hold MCSE certification from Microsoft and CCNA certification from Cisco Systems. I received my master degree in Computer Science at Chungnam University, Korea. I am pursuing my PhD. I am already done with my coursework and starting my dissertation.

I believe I have the qualities that you expect. I am very interested in this position. It would be a great opportunity for me to work at XXX company. I will contact you within the next two weeks to arrange an interview. You may reach me at phone or through email.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,
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Just a couple of notes - I don't have the energy to check it all. <backgroung in computer network> To me, this is a thing and not a field. " If "IDS" is part of the Firewall brand name, I doubt it includes a comma.

  • Just a couple of notes - I don't have the energy to check it all.
  • <backgroung in computer network> To me, this is a thing and not a field.
  • " If "IDS" is part of the Firewall brand name, I doubt it includes a comma.
  • " Like could be taken as "similar to," meaning that you haven't actually had any Firewall experience.
  • I'm not sure what it means to manage a system like Firewall.
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Just a couple of notes - I don't have the energy to check it all.

<backgroung in computer network> To me, this is a thing and not a field. I should think, "computer networking" or "computer networks."

I believe in the US we would say, "as a systems administrator in the Agency etc."

<managed security systems like
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Hi Avangi!
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Just found out about this website. I am looking for someone to read my cover letter as I am soon apply for one. Please check my letter and correct my mistakes. I would be more than happy to receive your respond soon.

Truly,

SAM


COVER LETTER

Dear xxxxx,


I am writing to express my interest as a specialist for warehouse logistics apprenticeship as advertised

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