0
Mountain Posted 19 years ago
Grammar

Please check my answers.

I have tried to correct the setences below, I just need someone to confirm it. Thanks in advance

Original
  1. When our Marketing Manager had to write a twenty page report, she started by collecting information, and organizing it.
  2. A business writters biggest problem is usually poor organization according to experts.
  3. The company Vice President came to the President and I asking for help with 2 complex but seperate advertising problems.
  4. Because neither of us were particularly creative we decided to organize a brainstorming session rather then work by ourself.
  5. Our brain storming session included: Amanda, Rory, Rashid and Cynthia.
  6. One of our principle goals were to create one hundred ideas in thiry minutes however we were prepared to meet up to 1 hour.
  7. Although we knew the principals of outlining we had trouble grouping our ideas into 3 to 5 major headings.
  8. Robyn Clarkes article titled A Better way to brainstorm which appeared in the magazine Black Enterprise was helpful to the President and I.
  9. Frontloading a message saves a readers time therefore its worth making the effort to put the main idea first.
  10. By learning to distinguish phases from clauses you;; be better able to avoid 3 basic sentence faults, the fragment, the run on sentence and the comma splice.
Mine
  1. When our marketing manager had to write a 20 page report; she started by collecting information and organizing it.
  2. A business writter's biggest problem is usually poor organization, according to experts.
  3. The company's vice-president came to the president and I asking for help with two complex but seperate advertising problems.
  4. Because neither of us were particularly creative; we decided to organize a brainstorming session rather than work by ourself.
  5. Our brainstorming session included Amanda, Rory, Rashid and Cynthia.
  6. One of our principle goals were to create 100 ideas in 30 minutes; however we were prepared to meet up to an hour.
  7. Although we knew the principles of outlining; we had trouble grouping our ideas into three to five major headings.
  8. Robyn Clarke's article entitled "A Better Way to Brainstorm", which appeared in the magazine "Black Enterprise" was helpful to the president and I.
  9. Front-loading a message saves a reader's time; therefore it's worth making the effort to put the main idea first.
  10. By learning to distinguish phases from clauses; you will able to avoid three basic sentence faults: the fragment, the run on sentence and the comma splice.
  

Top answer

Hi, When our Marketing Manager had to write a twenty page report, she started by collecting information and organizing it. A business writer's biggest problem is usually poor organization, according to experts. The company Vice President came to the President and me, asking for help with two complex but separate advertising problems.

— Clive

  • Hi, When our Marketing Manager had to write a twenty page report, she started by collecting information and organizing it.
  • A business writer's biggest problem is usually poor organization, according to experts.
  • The company Vice President came to the President and me, asking for help with two complex but separate advertising problems.
  • Because neither of us were particularly creative, we decided to organize a brainstorming session rather than work by ourselves.
  • Our brainstorming session included Amanda, Rory, Rashid and Cynthia.
Free · every Monday

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.

2 Answers
0
Hi,

  1. When our Marketing Manager had to write a twenty page report, she started by collecting information and organizing it.
  2. A business writer's biggest problem is usually poor organization, according to experts.
  3. The company Vice President came to the President and me, asking for help w
0
0
CliveThe company Vice President came to the President and me, asking for help with two complex but separate advertising problems.

Because neither of us were particularly creative, we decided to organize a brainstorming session rather than work by ourselves.

The first sentence is not
0

Related Questions