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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
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As we all take part in this meaningful event in the history of 36EBde,it is noteworthy to recognize the contributions of late Dr Rodrigo Lhemie Phd, a renowned Physician who became the Head of the YUEP at the peak of his career for his exemplary and dignified deeds in the service for the corps and the Physician Association as a whole thus naming of a new built hospital in his honor.
  

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It is a rather confused mess. You are trying to squeeze too much information into a single sentence. Break it up into 2 or 3 sentences.

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  • It is a rather confused mess.
  • You are trying to squeeze too much information into a single sentence.
  • Break it up into 2 or 3 sentences.
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It is a rather confused mess. You are trying to squeeze too much information into a single sentence. Break it up into 2 or 3 sentences.
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Could you please help try to do it
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Sure—after I see the effort that you put in to improve it by following my advice.
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