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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart compares the rates of unemployed women in four different nations of the UK over a 2-year period, starting from 2013.

Overall, it is clear that England and Scotland were the dominant countries in terms of female joblessness levels whilst unemployed women captured the lowest ratio in Wales and Northern Ireland compared to the former ones.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, jobless women in England reached the highest point of 6,8% among four countries in 2013, but then a slight drop by 0,3% in a year later. In contrast, although women's unemployment levels in Scotland stood at 6,1% in 2013, there was a minimal rise to 6,7% in 2014. Besides, 2014 witnessed a small drop of 5% in terms of women out of work. Moreover, the levels of unemployed women accounted for 5,6% in Northern Ireland in 2013 despite hitting a trough of 4,6% among 4 distinct countries in 2014.