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The pie charts display the proportion of finding news in Canada and Australia regarding five different methods.
Overall, sectors of the two charts have the same patterns with several differences in the figure. In addition, except TV and Online sectors, in two nations, the last three groups ranked in order print, radio and not specified.
In detail, the number of accessing online news occupied a significant share of the chart. While in Canada, it accounted for more than a third, that of Australia is over a half (52%). The next prominent sector is TV news which has the relative percentages in two nations with the figure being around 40%. The figure for print news in Canada was twice as many as that of Australia, at 14% and 7% respectively. Listening to the news on the radio in Canada was three times that in Australia was. Nowadays, finding news through the Internet is more and more popular than any others method.

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The pie charts display the proportion of finding news (that is very awkward and unnatural) in Canada and Australia regarding five different methods. (That is not very precise. "Not Specified" is not a method. ).
Overall, sectors of the two charts have the same patterns with several differences ~~in the figure~~. In addition, except TV and Online sectors, (The reader is very confused. You did not specify the five methods.) in two nations, (This implies that there are more than two.) the last three groups ranked in order print, radio and not specified.
In detail, the number of accessing (unnatural) online news occupied a significant share of the chart. While in Canada, it accounted for more than a third, that of Australia is over a half (52%). The next prominent method ~~sector~~ is TV news which has the relative percentages in two nations with the percentage ~~figure~~ being around 40%. The ~~figure~~ percentage for print news in Canada was twice as many (Many is for count nouns. Proportions are non-count.) as that of Australia, at 14% and 7% respectively. Listening to the news on the radio in Canada was three times that in Australia was. Nowadays, finding news through the Internet is more and more popular (There is no line graph showing change over time. You cannot see "more and more" when there is only one point in time.) than any others (wrong form) method.

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Sample essay:

The two pie charts, one for Canada and the other for Australia, break down the population into groups according to the primary way in which they get their news. Specifically, the charts show the percentage of people who go to either TV, Radio, Print media or the internet for news. There is also a miscellaneous category for all other sources.

Overall, the distribution shown in the pie charts is fairly similar with the internet and TV being the top two news sources. More than three quarters of the people in both countries use one of these two sources.

In detail, 76% of the Canadians get their news from either TV or Internet, in nearly equal proportions, 40% from TV and 36% online. Australians show a stronger preference for the Internet; a majority use it for the primary source (52%), and an additional 37% watch the TV for news. All together, the four named sources account for 97 to 98 percent of the populations. The least-used source is radio, with 7% of the Canadians and only 2% of Australians. Print news is twice as popular in Canada as Australia, but the percentages are rather small, 14% and 7%.

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