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Hi,Could somebody please check my grammar and pick out any mistakes that i very like make in below paragraphs pleaseI have experiences working with older and disable person while I was working at (company) as a (role). I helped them put together their choices available for them for their new home such as colours, kitchen area and room layout. I was also responsible to get their home adapted to their need which involve assessment of tenant by occupational therapist and instruct the contractor to carry out the adaptation. The experience has taught to me considerate, caring, supported, patient when dealing with vulnerable person.The experiences and knowledge gained by working for(company) on the regeneration project of an infamous estate which was more then often in the news for all the wrong reasons has taught me many significance lessons; The importance of community involvement, community cohesion, media, estate image, youth & adult activities, sport and employment has played major part to make regeneration sustainable and successful  Millions Thanks for your kindnessKingkong

Doctor D · Accepted Answer

Below are my suggestions for your paragraphs. The ~~crossouts~~ are my deletions and the color bar words are my replacements. There is more than one correct way to say what you have to say.

I gained experience ~~have experiences~~ working with older and disabled persons while I was working at (company) as a (role). I helped them put together the ~~their~~ choices available to ~~for~~ them for their new home, such as colours, kitchen area and room layout. I was also responsible for getting ~~to get~~ their home adapted to their needs, which involved an assessment of the tenant by the occupational therapist and instructing the contractor to carry out the adaptation. The experience ~~has~~ taught to me to be considerate, caring, supportive ~~supported~~, and patient when dealing with a vulnerable person.

The experiences and knowledge gained by working for (company) on the regeneration project of an infamous estate which was ~~more then~~ often in the news for all the wrong reasons has taught me many significance lessons;. ~~The importance of c~~ Community involvement, community cohesion, media attitudes, estate image, providing youth & adult activities, including sports and, finally, providing employment ~~has~~ --all played a major part ~~to make~~ in making the regeneration sustainable and successful.

American spelling is colors vs. colours.
When making a comparison, use "more than" rather than "more then." (Then refers to time).
When giving a list, use the colon rather than the semicolon. However it would be better to break up the last paragraph into two sentences. Right now you are putting a list of issues in the middle of two thoughts. You need to separate your thoughts into separate sentences. You cannot say, for example, that the importance of comunity involvement was both a significant lesson you learned and that it played a major part in making the regeneration successful. In the last half of the sentence, the "it" you are talking about is "community involvement" not "the importance of community involvement. " I hope this point is clear.
In rewriting the last paragraph, I had to flesh out your bare topics. You might chose other expressions to explain yourself instead.

Kingkong · Answer

Doctor D,

Thank you very much in correcting my paragraphs. I appreciate you clear and concise explaination. I ll remember the points regarding 'more than' and ';'.

Thanks a Millions

Kingkong

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