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Britishwannabe Posted 7 years ago
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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People hold different views on whether the government should only prioritize science subjects to progress. While it is true that focusing on science subjects is conducive to a country's development, I would argue that other subjects share equal importance.

On the one hand, there are several reasons to believe that concentrating on teaching science subjects contributes considerably to the advancement of a nation. Firstly, several scientific breakthroughs around the world are attributable to science subjects such as mathematics, physics and chemistry. For instance, profound knowledge of chemistry enables scientists and researchers to conduct multiple experiments and thus coin new drugs that cure and save thousands of lives. Secondly, with the aid of scientific knowledge, students are capable of solving a spectrum of real-world problems, which, in return, cultivates their imagination and creativity. Such capabilities would stimulate innovations that gain the country progress.

On the other hand, it appears to me that a sufficient amount of money should be dedicated to other subjects as well. Science is not the only factor contributing to the progress of a nation. In the era of globalization, diplomacy and international trading between countries play an indispensable role in fostering economic growth. Such activities cannot be engaged if there exist language barriers, which emphasizes the need for investing in language teaching. To illustrate, Vietnamese students nowadays can communicate in English confidently and fluently since their school curriculums focus on this language heavily. Such abilities enable them to work with abroad people, which gives rise to foreign investments from around the world.

In conclusion, science subjects, though being vital and conducive to a certain extent, should not be the only focal priority. Instead, substantial focuses on other subjects such as language would gain the country development and progress.

  

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The question is about progress, economic and other. Your essay is about the national school curriculum. Nowhere have you discussed "other types of progress".

  • The question is about progress, economic and other.
  • Your essay is about the national school curriculum.
  • Nowhere have you discussed "other types of progress".
  • It is as if you have adapted a pre-learnt essay to a different question.
  • So most of your essay is irrelevant, or you have at least failed to make a solid connection to the question.
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The question is about progress, economic and other. Your essay is about the national school curriculum. Nowhere have you discussed "other types of progress". It is as if you have adapted a pre-learnt essay to a different question. So most of your essay is irrelevant, or you have at least failed to make a solid connection to the question.

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britishwannabeOn the one hand, there are several reasons to believe that concentrating on teaching science subjects contributes considerably to the advancement of a nation. Firstly, several scientific breakthroughs around the world are attributable to science subjects such as mathematics, physics and chemistry.

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