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Kantav Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please, can anybody check this paragraph below for grammatical errors or if there is anything wrong with the writing please?
Hello,
English is my second language and I need someone to review this paragraph below please. This is about my involvement who the community and how I am unique. This is not the whole essay, but simply a paragraph. Please check it for me because I am struggling with English.
I have been an effective Sunday school teacher at my local church. By teaching elementary school children Biblical stories I help instill moral values and principles that will help them to make good decision later in life. Some of the ethical values that I taught these children include honesty, charity, responsibility and self discipline. I found teaching young children about the love of Christ is extremely rewarding, because I have the chance to teach virtues of good citizenship and help them develop good character. Overall, the moral and the ethical values that I hope to instill in these kids will have a long lasting impacts on their lives.
In addition, as an incoming president elect of the Youth Association, I will be working with other board members to plan family service projects or civic activities in the community. For instance, I have recently organized a charity drive that will collect toys, clothing to assist needy families and also raising fund to help support organization, such as "Build On" . By helping these kid grow spiritually, they also learned the joys of assisting others and develop a lifelong habits of service.
Thank you,
Joe
English is my second language and I need someone to review this paragraph below please. This is about my involvement who the community and how I am unique. This is not the whole essay, but simply a paragraph. Please check it for me because I am struggling with English.
I have been an effective Sunday school teacher at my local church. By teaching elementary school children Biblical stories I help instill moral values and principles that will help them to make good decision later in life. Some of the ethical values that I taught these children include honesty, charity, responsibility and self discipline. I found teaching young children about the love of Christ is extremely rewarding, because I have the chance to teach virtues of good citizenship and help them develop good character. Overall, the moral and the ethical values that I hope to instill in these kids will have a long lasting impacts on their lives.
In addition, as an incoming president elect of the Youth Association, I will be working with other board members to plan family service projects or civic activities in the community. For instance, I have recently organized a charity drive that will collect toys, clothing to assist needy families and also raising fund to help support organization, such as "Build On" . By helping these kid grow spiritually, they also learned the joys of assisting others and develop a lifelong habits of service.
Thank you,
Joe
Top answer
There were two paragraphs, so I edited both of them. Good luck. good decisions instead of good decision self-discipline instead of self discipline the virtues of cood citizenship instead of virtues of good citizenship a long-lasting impact instead of long-lasting impacts president-elect instead of president elect raising funds to help instead of raising fund to help toys and clothing instead of toys, clothing organizations such as instead of organization, such as a lifelong habit instead of a lifelong habits Leave a blank line before Thank you, Joe, as above.
- There were two paragraphs, so I edited both of them.
- Good luck.
- good decisions instead of good decision self-discipline instead of self discipline the virtues of cood citizenship instead of virtues of good citizenship a long-lasting impact instead of long-lasting impacts president-elect instead of president elect raising funds to help instead of raising fund to help toys and clothing instead of toys, clothing organizations such as instead of organization, such as a lifelong habit instead of a lifelong habits Leave a blank line before Thank you, Joe, as above.
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There were two paragraphs, so I edited both of them. Good luck.
good decisions instead of good decision
self-discipline instead of self discipline
the virtues of cood citizenship instead of virtues of good citizenship
a long-lasting impact instead of long-lasting impacts
president-elect instead of president elect
raising funds to help instead of raising fund to help
good decisions instead of good decision
self-discipline instead of self discipline
the virtues of cood citizenship instead of virtues of good citizenship
a long-lasting impact instead of long-lasting impacts
president-elect instead of president elect
raising funds to help instead of raising fund to help
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