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TOPIC: This graph illustrates the number of Chinese, Japanese and Indian learners who enrolled at North Dean University over a five-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The given graph provides onlookers with a look at the total of students from Chin, Japan, India got in North Dean University in a five-year term.

Briefly, the figure of Japanese students had undergone a massive drop while the Chinese and Indian seem to rise steadily.

Since the 1995, we could see that the quantity of Indian learners had slowly increased by an average of 20 people each year. However, Chinese ones were a little dramatic, after an extend by 40 students between 1999 and 2000, the number remained stable until a big expansion from 40 to 1000 people in just two years.

In contrast, was the number of Japanese, despite taking the priority in 1999 with 120 students, the figure constantly declined to only 40 left in 2001. Then, the extreme collapse seemed to stop for a year before another slightly fall by 20 people in 2003.

By; Pham Anh Minh