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Jenn123 Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please advise

I'm just wondering, is this paragraph hanging or incomplete?

Cyril follows his journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he meets the locals and be inspired for his magic acts that are set to touch the hearts of viewers.
  

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Cyril follows his journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he meets the locals and be inspired for his magic acts that are set to touch the hearts of viewers. " The yellow highlighted part is bad grammar. Also, "follow a journey" is unnatural.

  • Cyril follows his journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he meets the locals and be inspired for his magic acts that are set to touch the hearts of viewers.
  • " The yellow highlighted part is bad grammar.
  • Also, "follow a journey" is unnatural.
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Cyril follows his journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he meets the locals and be inspired for his magic acts that are set to touch the hearts of viewers.

The sentence goes awry at the "and." The yellow highlighted part is bad grammar.

Also, "follow a journey" is unnatural.
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How about this,

Cyril on a journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he astonishing people from all walks of life with never-seen-before with his magic, inconceivable illusions.
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Your sentence had no main verb. Here are a couple of alternatives

Cyril journeys through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, where he astonishes people from all walks of life with never-seen-before magical, inconceivable illusions.

Cyril is on a journey through key iconic cities like Singapore, Kuala Lumpur and Taipei, astonishing people from all walks of l

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