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Topic: Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.

It is thought that increasing the cost of fuel is the most efficient way to tackle global environmental issues. To this extent, while I accept that to raise price of fuel can improve the extreme level of problem, I also believe that there are many actions we need to taken.

On the first place, it is undeniable that increasing the fuel price makes a large contribution to environmental enhancement. Firstly, it is able to lessen the annual amount of fuel consumption. Because the cost of fuel is getting higher, consumers have to use daily materials as much economically as possible. Second, due to the reduction to amount of fuel used, the forests and mines can avoid being over-exploited, which gives nature a chance to recover its loss.

However, this is not the only solution which we can rely on to solve this alarming situation. Apart from that, local authority must raise awareness of citizens about the value of fuel and mention about facts that we are facing. Moreover, it is compulsory that the government establishes much stricter laws to prevent many people from exploring natural resources illegally even imprison them if the number of raw material is beyond permission.

In conclusion, if fuel market is evolving gradually, there will be many problems dealt at certain level. But as long as we complement all actions above, I believe that the natural problem we are encountering will be solved completely.

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aqua chalk 101Topic: Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.

You did not post the complete topic. The essay prompt is very important.

I will assume this is the topic:

Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that increasing the cost of fuel is the most efficient way to tackle global environmental issues. To this extent, (That does not make sense. You need to use an adverb of extent. in your answer. ) while I accept that ~~to raise~~ raising the price of fuel can improve the extreme level of problem, (That does not make sense.) I also believe that there are many actions we need to taken.

You did not answer the essay prompt. "To what extent do you agree or disagree."
You must use an adverb of extent.

e.g.

I completely disagree. Raising price of an essential commodity will only hurt the poorest people and do nothing for water and air pollution.

I somewhat agree. Although raising the price may reduce usage of fossil fuels and curtail emissions, there are better methods for cleaning up the air and water.

I mostly disagree in that it may help a little bit, it will not be a good long-term solution.

I partially agree ...

You need to define what these "environmental problems" are that you are writing about. Is it microscopic threads of plastic in the ocean, or smoke in the air, or litter in the park, or extinction of animal species, or climate change, or chemicals and sewage in the local rivers, or something else? Then you can write some good arguments.

On the first place, (wrong phrase) it is undeniable that increasing the fuel price makes a large contribution to reducing ongoing environmental damage. enhancement. (wrong word) ~~Firstly~~, First, it ~~is able to~~ lessens the annual amount of fuel consumption. Because the cost of fuel is getting higher, consumers have to use daily materials (What do you mean?) as ~~much~~ economically as possible. Second, due to the reduction to amount of fuel used, (I do not understand the connection. We still need wood for houses, and gold, silver, copper and iron ore from mines.) the forests and mines will not be ~~can avoid being~~ over-exploited, which gives nature a chance to recover its loss.

However, this is not the only solution which we can rely on to solve this alarming situation. Apart from that, the local authorities must raise the awareness of citizens about the value of fuel and explain the problems ~~mention about facts that~~ we are facing. Moreover, it is ~~compulsory~~ better if ~~that~~ the government establishes much stricter laws to prevent many people from exploring natural resources illegally even imprison them if the ~~number~~ (wrong word - material is non-count) amount of raw material is beyond the legal limit. ~~permission~~.

In conclusion, if fuel market is evolving gradually, (off topic. It is not about the fuel market.) there will be many problems dealt at certain level. But as long as we complement (wrong word) all actions above, I believe that the natural problem (What problem do you mean?) we are encountering will be solved completely.

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