Personal statement letter

Hi i need to write a personal statement letter to my uni application abroad in the uk can anyone help me a little with what to say and maybe what not to say ?

Dear sir or Madam,

I’m Diana Codices and I'm 17 years old and it's with pleasure that I am applying for the course of travel and Tourism
The reason to why I decided to apply for this course it's from personal interest that I have for the industry and from personal experience travelling, where I have gained a lot of passion and curiosity of being part of this course, as being dynamic, and a part of a strong and fast growing business with a wide-range of opportunities.
Coming from a city really base around travel and tourism and where tourism is really important, of course, lead me to become captivated to acknowledge more of it.
My decision to study abroad was based on not only the offering facilities and courses in the university, but also by the way things are taught, where you have more autonomy and practical which I believe to be a great initiation to the business world, allowing me to develop more my team work capacity and to be more effective (and experience it through fieldwork and internships). since it's a way of learning that I find really motivational and something I have never been able to experience before making me really look forward to it. Also, I’m inspired by the English lifestyle and culture to follow this career, by the fact that the UK it's a unique city and where there are so much multiculturalism and such international access encouraged by the tourism industry growth worldwide.
Hospitality and society's understanding have been always areas of interest of mine and that became more integrated into my lifestyle. This guided me to take the course in high school of languages and humanities, where I study subjects as geography that helped me understand and develop knowledge in the way societies and, for example, are distributed and social differences within that society and also understand more economic differences in developed countries and why there still are undeveloped countries in the world as well as other actual subjects like the crisis, terrorism and refugees and economics, apart from my native language Portuguese and the reason for me to choose this course was the opportunity to study new languages where I have basic (mastery) over French, German and English. From talking to people online and being part of a big family from all over the world lead me to learn English, most of learned from personal interested and autonomy and from talking to other natives and also from travelling that now it's such a great opportunity that allows me to meet new people and learn more from them and where they are from and also study abroad.
Most of my communication skills I got from working small works and events such as working for a magazine with a group of other girls were while modelling we would promote many activities available in our city promoted into an online magazine,where we once did a buggy tour around the best landmarks of our town and also did for an adventure, nature park, which extended my comprehension in the tourism and ways of promoting it in my city and also interaction as a group. Also, I developed my teamwork capacities and learnt to listen and help others as well as to give my option and respect other being part of small workshops, for example, learning about teen problems and risk behaviours that helped me to understand different points of view and life lessons.
With this course, I pretend not only to complete the 3 years understanding travel and tourism industry and society being part of the university community that will allow me through making friends from other courses to integrate myself in basic understanding of other areas and try to incorporate them into travel and tourism. Also, I intend trough this experience to do internships and work along part-time jobs that will not only give me professional experience, but also integrate with the society and other business tips and skills in the future I aspire to apply my abilities motivating people to be a part of a more tourists and helping the environment, in addition, to providing them with the best travelling experience and memories and hope to work with international corporations and innovate the tourism industry by investing more in and associating it with more modern ways of tourism and travel experiences such as incorporating a more technological perspective.
Travel and tourism its a fast growing and wide-range industry that people have become more invested in,and where travelling has become a really popular aspect and lifestyle, where such a simple act can provide us new memories and cultural knowledge and experience, as well as the opportunity to meet new people and their lifestyles, culture, beliefs and see the world we live in and enjoy its uniqueness the best way possible.