Personal Statement Help Needed. Fast.

0 This is my personal statement, wich I will send to 3 different universities.02br
00 I'm not sure about the order in wich letter is written, nor of the grammar/spelling.02br
00 Secondly, I don't know how to adress the people of the admissions commitee.02br
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00 Because Biology has always been a source of curiosity for me, I have chosen to study Biomedical Sciences. From an early age, the human body and her reactions to the ‘outside world’ have been mysteries, which I can’t wait to unravel.02br
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00 I am always looking for new challenges to develop myself further and my credo is: If you can do it and if you want to; you should. 02br
00 I live in the Netherlands, where I attend the highest level of secondary education in Rotterdam and I will have my final examinations in (among others) Biology, Physics and Chemistry.02br
00 From the age of twelve I’ve been an enthusiastic volleyball player in my hometown; we regularly play competition matches with other teams from Rotterdam and other cities in the neighbourhood.02br
00 This long experience with team sport has taught me a great deal about working together with others in the pursuit of a common goal. 02br
00 I also have a great interest in literature, both Dutch and English. Hence, I will not shrink form a challenging (course)book or assignment; if anything, I would seize it as a chance to broaden my general development. This love for books and language has tempted me to study linguistics, but a wish for a more practical study made me defer from that.02br
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00 It is my sincere hope to be a part of the progress in the field of biomedical sciences, progress made possible by researchers all over the world. How do medicines work and how can we make them better, more effective and user-friendlier? These are the questions I would like to be able to give an answer to after my studies at your university. 02br
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00 Searching for possibilities to broaden my horizon, I looked for universities abroad, offering the course of my choice. Due to possible language issues, my choice was between Italy (the country of my mother) and the United Kingdom. After careful consultation with my surroundings, and myself the latter came forth strongest. 02br
00 That Schotland came out strongest was partly due to my already knowing people there. I believe this will make te transition all the easier from Holland to Schotland.02br
00 Partly because of the fact that I have always found languages both fascinating and easy to apprehend (come June, I will have passed exams in 6 different languages, including ancient Greek and Latin, all with good results) Scotland has my preference to live and study.02br
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