Personal Statement

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Personal Statement
My main motivation behind this application is my keen interest and experience in the field of finance. I have researched and experiences finance in different industry such as banking and filmproduction. However banking is a interest and challenging field in which I would like to gain expertise.The Banking and Finance course at Nottingham University will broaden my knowledge and understanding of the above field. I have achieved high 2:1 in my final year which I hope will demonstrate my academic ability to study at this level.
I have had an avid interest in financial services from secondary school and determined to become successful in this field. During my second year at university, I joined the summer internship program with ANZ Bank. I investigated company’s existing finance case studies. This involved studying financial aspects of banking industry by analysing business strategies, financial budgeting and capital investment, which liaised with senior management team. This experience helped me to develop excellent time management, problem-solving and organisational skills.
Apart from academic interests, I also have a diverse experience in extra-curricular activities. I was selected as an secretary of Vietnamese student in Manchester. I managed VSS’ tight budget, coordinated main events and assisted VSS president. This required good communication and multitasking skills.
I am particularly keen on undertaking a Msc course at Nottingham Business School because of your reputation of excelent teaching quality and vibrant academic community. Your university also provides excellent working and recreation facilities for graduate students which demonstrate your commitment to the graduate student body. Following the Msc course I would like to further my education with profesional financial qualification Chartered Financial Analyst (CFA).

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