Personal statement

Hello,
I'm trying to get accepted in one of the universities in UK by applying through UCAS. I wrote a Personal Statement and I would like it to be checked. But I don't want to put it in public. So maybe someone can review it?
If you have a PayPal account I can pay you several dollars for your help.
Write me an email on superis at takas dot lt

Thanks in advance.
Rimas