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Demart28 Posted 17 years ago
Letter Writing

Personal profile

I have a dillema regarding a sentence below.
It is a part of my personal profile in my CV.
Could you please have a look and check a grammar please?

Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care and administrative skills and a succesful record in Telecom trade, seeking an employment in the Office Admin field.

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Excellent organisational and administrative skills with experience in dealing with customers and high level workloads within strict deadlines.
Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care skills and a successful record in telecom trade, seekind a career where a backgroung in problem-solving would be adventageous.

Thanks in advance
  

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Hi, my recommended changes are in red and comments in blue- Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care and administrative skills and a succesful record in Telecom trade, seeking an employment in the field of Office Administration. ) ** Excellent organisational and administrative skills with experience in dealing with customers and high-level workloads within strict deadlines. Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care skills and a successful record in telecom trade, seeking a career where a background in problem-solving would be advantageous.

— AliceW31

  • Hi, my recommended changes are in red and comments in blue- Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care and administrative skills and a succesful record in Telecom trade, seeking an employment in the field of Office Administration.
  • ) ** Excellent organisational and administrative skills with experience in dealing with customers and high-level workloads within strict deadlines.
  • Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care skills and a successful record in telecom trade, seeking a career where a background in problem-solving would be advantageous.
  • )
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Hi, my recommended changes are in red and comments in blue-

Highly motivated, effective communicator with strong customer care and administrative skills and a succesful record in Telecom trade, seeking an employment in the field of Office Administration. (On a resume, CV, or any business documentation, it is better not to abbreviate.)

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Thanks a lot!
You are very helpful.
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