People attend college or university for many different reasons

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, there are thousand universities which compete together to be in ranking top 20, this demonstrates that number of people attending universities is increasing, and having a university degree starts to become a must to enter work life.

First of all, if there is only one place when we can acquire different knowledge in professionalism way would be a university. Universities designed strong programs to teach students in high different subjects. All courses are taught by professor and degree holder using adequate materials and long years of experience. No other place could afford all these qualities in same time.

Secondly, it is known that to get a well-paid and respectful job, you definitely need a university degree. People who are attending universities are looking for better future, and getting in good position. Certain career can’t be start without having a special degree as doctors and engineer.

All in all, attending college or university is still an expensive way to get better knowledge, and not all can afford it, therefore people start earlier their professional career.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

I have indicated some of the grammatical problems with yellow highlighting. Your reasoning is not clear. You need more examples, such as people you know. The instructions say "give specific reasons" and "give specific examples."

Nowadays, there are thousand universities which compete together to be in ranking top 20, (I don't understand what universities competing in a ranking system has to do with the reasons someone would go to university. ) this demonstrates that number of people attending universities is increasing (How? Give a reason. ), and having a university degree starts to become a must to enter work life.

First of all, if there is only one place when we can acquire different knowledge in professionalism (Not an adjective) way would be a university. (You are missing the subject in the sentence) Universities designed strong programs to teach students in high (What is a high subject?) different subjects. All courses are taught by professor (Does one professor teach all the courses?) and degree holder using adequate (Only adequate?) materials and long years of experience. No other place could afford all these qualities in same time.

Secondly, it is known that to get a well-paid and respectful job, you definitely need a university degree. People who are attending universities are looking for better future, and getting in good position. Certain career can’t be start without having a special degree as doctors and engineer.

All in all, attending college or university is still an expensive way to get better knowledge, and not all can afford it, therefore people start earlier their professional career. (I don't understand your logic here.)

Cachmere1987 · Answer

thank you

I didn't know that specific reason are about people we know

AlpheccaStars · Answer

cachmere1987I didn't know that specific reason

So nobody you know has gone, is going to, or wants to go to university? Why don't you want to be first?

Then, just Google for "Why I want to go to college" and get some answers that you can use, like this article with five different reasons:
http://www.greatschools.org/gk/articles/cb-extras-1-2-havecollegetalknow/

And this article which refutes the reasons to go to college:
http://thechoice.blogs.nytimes.com/2012/02/02/why-go-to-college-at-all/?_r=0

Cachmere1987 · Answer

no what i tried to say that I didn't know that they mean by specific  reason is to give an example about people we know

AlpheccaStars · Answer

cachmere1987 I didn't know that they mean by specific reason is to give an example about people we know

They didn't say that in the instructions. But a really special specific example is someone you actually know who is going or went to college. If you don't know anyone who went to college, then you have to research a specific example.

Anonymous · Answer

cachmere1987Hi
kindly evaluate my essay, thank you for your help
People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are thousand universities which compete together to be in ranking top 20, this demonstrates that number of people attending universities is increasing, and having a university degree starts to become a must to enter work life.
First of all, if there is only one place when we can acquire different knowledge in professionalism way would be a university. Universities designed strong programs to teach students in high different subjects. All courses are taught by professor and degree holder using adequate materials and long years of experience. No other place could afford all these qualities in same time.
Secondly, it is known that to get a well-paid and respectful job, you definitely need a university degree. People who are attending universities are looking for better future, and getting in good position. Certain career can’t be start without having a special degree as doctors and engineer.
All in all, attending college or university is still an expensive way to get better knowledge, and not all can afford it, therefore people start earlier their professional career.

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