Pease helpmy to correct my "Letter of Motivation"

0please post comments, suggestions, critics and stuff like this as soon as posible!!!02br
00the deadline is saturday!!! I really appreciate it! THANKS. 02br
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00Dear Sir, Madam,02br
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00with this letter I would like to introduce my candidature as a second year student at the University of applied sciences (Hochschule 00). I expect to receive my Bachelor of Science in 01i00Digital Media.02i00 02br
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00My name is [Name], I am 20 years old and I live in 010200, 00.02br
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00Going abroad in a different country, living in a new culture, getting to know different points of view and studying in a different language has always been one of my biggest dreams.02br
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00Due to financial and personal causes, I have never had a possibility to do so. That is why because my eagerness and motivation to use this chance are extremely high.01i00 02i00When I read about the exchange programs, offered by my university, I put all my hopes into it and wished that this would be my chance to fullfill my dreams.02br
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00To my mind one of the most important things young people should learn during their education, is to understand why people might think differently and why there are different points of view in this world. And in my opinion there is no better way to achieve this capability than going abroad and living a different life with a lot of foreign people around, who could tell me about their habits and traditions. Even though, I really appreciate my culture and my country I would love to change my habits for one academic year and live a different life, while telling other people, who might not have the practicability to go abroad, about my culture and traditions.02br
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00I am a person with a huge perseverance level, someone who is structured, orderly, motivated and ambitious. I can say I am an independent team player, and very flexible besides that I have great organizational skills. It would be an honour to express my qualities in the ... Institute of Technology in order to make a genuine contribution to the Institute. At the same time, it would be an honour to expand and enlarge my skills and knowledge in the Institute of ... .01b01i02i02b02br
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00In particular, I am interested in learning more about Web Design, game development, animation and 3D Modelling and also about programms like Java, HTML, XML and Flash.02br
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00Thereafter I want to use the acquired knowledge to continue my Bachelor of Science in Digital Media successfully. 02br
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00Additionally, I am very excited to continue my studies on a different language and to experience if whether universities and countries put emphasis on the same topics as in my country. 02br
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00Thank you for considering application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.00Sincerely yours,02br
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