Paraphrasing techniques and Sentences in IELTS band scores.

Hello, it's me again. I have learned some paraphrasing techniques and practice some sentences so please help verify them and if possible please help me to assess band score for them too. Thanks in advance

Furthermore, I have some alternative words in bold so please help me assess these options.

1. Detailed description of crimes on TV is having a bad effect on society, so it should be restricted.

Describing criminal activities exhaustively/thoroughly on TV is terribly affecting society, so it should be subject to restrictions.

There should be a restriction to the comprehensive description of offenses on TV that terribly affecting society.

It is necessary for placing restrictions on the thorough description of criminal activities on TV that terribly affecting society.

It is vital for the authorities to impose restrictions on the detailed description of offenses on TV that detrimentally affecting society.

1. The world’s most urgent problems can be solved by international collaboration.

The globe’s most demanding issues can be solved by international cooperation.

Worldwide coordination should be the crucial factor/element/key to solve the world’s most serious problems.

It is essential to have a global collaboration as a solution for the globally most demanding affairs.

1. The government spends too much money on developing space exploration technology. There are many other financial needs that the government should address instead.

The government allocates/pays too much money for advancing space exploration technology. It is argued that other finance support/subsidies should be addressed instead.

The development of space exploration technology is invested/endowed with too much money by the government while it is essential for other financial demands to be addressed/noticed/dealt with instead.

The authority allocates a lot of money for funding the development of space exploration technology. There are a plethora of other financial demands that the government should brace/reckon/prompt instead.

1. Some unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programs.

Some non-paying community work should be done by students as a mandatory part of high school curriculum.

Several unpaid community services should be an obligatory part of high school extracurricular activities.

It is necessary for some unpaid community work to be a mandatory part of high school programs.

Some non-paying jobs that benefit the community should be a compulsory module of high school programs.

1. In order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers.

In order to enhance educational quality, high school students are inspired to comment or even criticize their teachers.

In favor of advancing educational qualification, high school students are stimulated to make commentary or even find faults of their teachers.

It is argued that high schools provide/offer students with encouragement to make comments or even criticize their teachers for the reason to boost educational qualification.

1. Governments should spend money on measures to save languages that are used by few speakers.

Money should be allocated for measures by governments to rescue languages that are spoken by a few speakers.

The authorities should invest money in/put up the money for/support financially for finding methods to save languages that are used by a few speakers.

It is vital that governments should allocate money for/pay a subsidy to/subsidizes measures to rescue languages that are rarely spoken.

1. Public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people will see historical objects and works of art by using a computer.

National museums and art exhibitions may not be necessary because people will see historical objects and artwork by using a computer.

Public museums and art galleries may not be necessitated since people will discover historical items and pieces of art by surfing on a computer.

It is not necessary for the existence of public museums and art galleries due to the fact that people will see historical objects and art pieces through accessing on a computer.

1. Too much attention and too many resources are given to protect wild animals and birds.

A lot of consideration and redundant resources are given to/allocated to conserve/preserve wild animals and birds.

It is argued that there are too much attention and a plethora of resources are given to conserve/preserve animal wildlife and birds.

Governments/Authorities/People deliberately notice and spend/allocate too many resources on/to protecting/conserving/preserving wild animals and birds.

1. Artists should receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work.

Artists deserved to/should be subsidized by the authority in order to maintain/progress/pursue/endure their work.

The government should provide/aid/assist artists with funding/budget/capital/money in order for them to pursue their work.

It is vital/necessary for the government/authority to provide funding/budget assistance for artists to keep their work continue.

1. The performance of staff can have significant impact on the success of a company.

The success of a company can be affected significantly by their staff’s performance.

Employee’s well-performed job can make a remarkable impact on the successful operation of a company.

It is argued that the performance of the employee affects radically the success of a company.