Paragraphs analysing characters in two classic stories.

I'm writing analysis of two characters in two stories. Could you please correct the flow and wording?

Apart from the affinity that Emma and Leon are having, I am also interested in reading about Emma’s perception of her baby’s gender. She dreams of having a son so that he has more freedom in pursuing his goals without worrying about financial problems or the dependence of the women at that time on others.

Pierre just keeps making mistakes. He needs more lessons to develop his mental maturity. He will accept that nothing has happened. His will is easily influenced by other’s saying. He’s so weak-willed. With the mishaps potentially happening to him, I hope he still stands still and take lessons from failure. His desire for love perhaps causes him to turn from an apology.