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Cute572 Posted 18 years ago
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00 Please check my paragraph for mistakes and wrong wordings. 02 br
00 And tell me, metaphor i used in opening line, can we use like this in topic sentences? 02 br
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01 font 01 i 00 The computer, the 01 u 00 caretaker 02 u 00 of my studies, lies over the flat table at the other side of my desk. Although it serves as a machine but in my weak spellings and grammar, it works like a 01 u 00 life saver 02 u 00 . Usually my long sentences and paragraph’s final revision is done by it. A heavy monitor is lying on the top with gray protected shield and 02 i 02 font 01 i 00 some sack of books and a cd stand beside it 02 i 00 . Just below I see my easy-to-press keyboard carrying the soft sound keys on it. Two audio speaker’s stands at each side of monitor like 01 u 00 high trees surround the valley. 02 u 00 The fast-pace mouse is firmly stays [verb is appropriate?] on the top of the black sponge pad, next to the keyboard. Down on the shelf stands the 01 u 00 nerve center, 02 u 00 the central control processing unit with its complicated integrated system. In front of table, I see a small frail stool resting on my bright carpet’s outer rim. 00 02 br
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00 Please check my paragraph for mistakes and wrong wordings. 02 br
00 And tell me, metaphor i used in opening line, can we use like this in topic sentences? 02 br
00 Thanks! 02 br
01 font 01 i 00 The computer, the 01 u 00 caretaker 02 u 00 of my studies, lies over the flat table at the other side of my desk. Although it serves as a machine but in my weak spellings and grammar, it works like a 01 u 00 life saver 02 u 00 . Usually my long sentences and paragraph’s final revision is done by it. A heavy monitor is lying on the top with gray protected shield and 02 i 02 font 01 i 00 some sack of books and a cd stand beside it 02 i 00 . Just below I see my easy-to-press keyboard carrying the soft sound keys on it. Two audio speaker’s stands at each side of monitor like 01 u 00 high trees surround the valley. 02 u 00 The fast-pace mouse is firmly stays [verb is appropriate?] on the top of the black sponge pad, next to the keyboard. Down on the shelf stands the 01 u 00 nerve center, 02 u 00 the central control processing unit with its complicated integrated system. In front of table, I see a small frail stool resting on my bright carpet’s outer rim. 00 02 br
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02 br 01 b 01 i 00 I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics. I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words: 02 i 02 b 02 br 02 br 01 b 00 My 02 b 00 computer, the 01 del 00 caretaker 02 del 00 of my studies, 01 u 00 lies over 02 u 00 the 01 del 00 flat 02 del 00 table at the 01 del 00 other 02 del 00 side of my desk. Although it 01 b 00 is 02 b 00 a machine 01 del 00 but 02 del 00 in my weak 01 u 00 spellings 02 u 00 and grammar, it 01 b 00 is 02 b 00 a life saver.
- 02 br 01 b 01 i 00 I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics.
- I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words: 02 i 02 b 02 br 02 br 01 b 00 My 02 b 00 computer, the 01 del 00 caretaker 02 del 00 of my studies, 01 u 00 lies over 02 u 00 the 01 del 00 flat 02 del 00 table at the 01 del 00 other 02 del 00 side of my desk.
- Although it 01 b 00 is 02 b 00 a machine 01 del 00 but 02 del 00 in my weak 01 u 00 spellings 02 u 00 and grammar, it 01 b 00 is 02 b 00 a life saver.
- Usually 01 b 00 it does 02 b 00 my long sentences and 01 u 00 paragraph’s 02 u 00 final revision 01 del 00 is done by it 02 del 00 .
- A heavy monitor is 01 del 00 lying 02 del 00 on the top with 01 b 00 a 02 b 00 gray 01 u 00 protected 02 u 00 shield and 01 u 00 some sack 02 u 00 of books and a 01 u 00 cd 02 u 00 stand beside it.
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01 b 01 i 00 I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics. I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words: 02 i 02 b 02 br
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01 b 01 i 00 I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics. I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words: 02 i 02 b 02 br
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0 Thanks 01 b 00 Mister Micawber! 02 b 02 br
00 Well i m trying to write descriptive paragraph that's why i used many strange words. But i noted the grammar mistakes and your suggestions 05 0 010id 1
00 Well i m trying to write descriptive paragraph that's why i used many strange words. But i noted the grammar mistakes and your suggestions 05 0 010id 1
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Hello guys i have made not much but few changes could you plz check my descriptive paragraph for grammar check only Thanks!
My combined study partner, Computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a goldsmith wrought the gold. A rhomb shaped monitor, with cling gra
My combined study partner, Computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a goldsmith wrought the gold. A rhomb shaped monitor, with cling gra
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I have already commented on the style problem. Below, I have underlined incorrect or unnatural grammar and vocabulary only:
My combined study partner, Computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a gol
I have already commented on the style problem. Below, I have underlined incorrect or unnatural grammar and vocabulary only:
My combined study partner, Computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a gol
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My combined study partner,computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a goldsmith wrought the gold.
Thanks Mister Micawber,
Please tell me why this underline is incorrect. i have used these words with known meaning. And wrou
Thanks Mister Micawber,
Please tell me why this underline is incorrect. i have used these words with known meaning. And wrou
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Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies.-- The computer assists, not the versatility; 'adept' is for people.
And wrought mean shaped, so why its wrong here ? -- It is the wrong tense.
connected is wrong word? -- The verb should be passive in aspect.
wavy mean twisted cables , thats not sutibale as well? -- 'Wavy' is for hair; it is a pleasant i
Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies.-- The computer assists, not the versatility; 'adept' is for people.
And wrought mean shaped, so why its wrong here ? -- It is the wrong tense.
connected is wrong word? -- The verb should be passive in aspect.
wavy mean twisted cables , thats not sutibale as well? -- 'Wavy' is for hair; it is a pleasant i
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Thanks for pointing out my mistakes Mister Micawber !
Well i have change the whole point and rephrase: Please check these sentences
My computer, a great cyber tutor plays like a helper in the crucial times of my studies (phrase ok or too long?), lies on the russet computer desk. Certain installed applications and language tools assist me deftly, while also allow me t
Well i have change the whole point and rephrase: Please check these sentences
My computer, a great cyber tutor plays like a helper in the crucial times of my studies (phrase ok or too long?), lies on the russet computer desk. Certain installed applications and language tools assist me deftly, while also allow me t
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OK, now let's try not to be so grandiose and wordy:
My computer, my cyber tutor, a great help in my studies, stands on the russet computer desk. Its applications and language tools assist me efficiently, rectifying my grammar and typographical errors.
My speedy mouse sits quietly on its black spo
OK, now let's try not to be so grandiose and wordy:
My computer, my cyber tutor, a great help in my studies, stands on the russet computer desk. Its applications and language tools assist me efficiently, rectifying my grammar and typographical errors.
My speedy mouse sits quietly on its black spo
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