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Kingworm Posted 21 years ago
Grammar
Paragraph issues
Hey everyone.
I'm writing a short story but am having trouble producing new paragraphs. What I have written thus far is comprised into a single paragraph, which I know must be wrong.
It is as follows:
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Tomas scribbled at the desk with force, scratching and screeching, disturbing the quiet classroom atmosphere. Mrs. Clair Jacobson had had about enough, but was reluctant to send Tomas to the head teacher’s office. In her three months at Brooksbury, in teaching Tomas and the rest of the 10th year class, she had concluded that such a punishment would prove baseless, as no marks of any kind would be found on Tomas’s desk. In the beginning Mrs. Jacobson believed that Tomas was pulling a trick on her, drawing her attention over to his desk only to find nothing to be found. Clair would grow frustrated with this apparent stunt as time drew forward. Unknowing how to explain the situation to her superior, Clair decided to let it ride, hoping that he would grow out of his childish trickery as the year progressed.
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Help would be very much appreciated.
I'm writing a short story but am having trouble producing new paragraphs. What I have written thus far is comprised into a single paragraph, which I know must be wrong.
It is as follows:
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Tomas scribbled at the desk with force, scratching and screeching, disturbing the quiet classroom atmosphere. Mrs. Clair Jacobson had had about enough, but was reluctant to send Tomas to the head teacher’s office. In her three months at Brooksbury, in teaching Tomas and the rest of the 10th year class, she had concluded that such a punishment would prove baseless, as no marks of any kind would be found on Tomas’s desk. In the beginning Mrs. Jacobson believed that Tomas was pulling a trick on her, drawing her attention over to his desk only to find nothing to be found. Clair would grow frustrated with this apparent stunt as time drew forward. Unknowing how to explain the situation to her superior, Clair decided to let it ride, hoping that he would grow out of his childish trickery as the year progressed.
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Help would be very much appreciated.
Top answer
It is not always an easy task, Kingworm. Not only should a new paragraph begin 'when the topic changes' (often a hard point to judge), but also paragraphs should simply be not too short or two long-- paragraph breaks are in many ways like extended full stops: a breathing or thinking break, a point to bookmark the reading until tomorrow. This is what I would do here: Tomas scribbled at the desk with force, scratching and screeching, disturbing the quiet classroom atmosphere.
- It is not always an easy task, Kingworm.
- Not only should a new paragraph begin 'when the topic changes' (often a hard point to judge), but also paragraphs should simply be not too short or two long-- paragraph breaks are in many ways like extended full stops: a breathing or thinking break, a point to bookmark the reading until tomorrow.
- This is what I would do here: Tomas scribbled at the desk with force, scratching and screeching, disturbing the quiet classroom atmosphere.
- Mrs.
- Clair Jacobson had had about enough, but was reluctant to send Tomas to the head teacher’s office.
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It is not always an easy task, Kingworm. Not only should a new paragraph begin 'when the topic changes' (often a hard point to judge), but also paragraphs should simply be not too short or two long-- paragraph breaks are in many ways like extended full stops: a breathing or thinking break, a point to bookmark the reading until tomorrow.
This is what I would do here:
Tom
This is what I would do here:
Tom
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