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Perfect Stranger Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing
[paragraph] corrections
Dear Users,
Could you please have a look at the following paragraph and tell me if it contains any serious mistakes?
In last year’s US History (I) course we covered a solid number of complex historical concepts. We had enough time to scrutinize many primary and secondary sources, and delve into details without rushing through the content. I have to say that the expectations set towards the students were quite high and it was a challenge to receive a high grade. Carrie proved readiness to learn and an ability to intellectually engage the scrutinized materials, as well as participate in debates and discussions on prevalent historical themes. She managed to finish the course being one of the top learners, and given the fact that she is younger than her peers also proves her intellectual maturity. Her ability to critically approach the puzzles of history was also reflected in her writing.
Thank you.
Could you please have a look at the following paragraph and tell me if it contains any serious mistakes?
In last year’s US History (I) course we covered a solid number of complex historical concepts. We had enough time to scrutinize many primary and secondary sources, and delve into details without rushing through the content. I have to say that the expectations set towards the students were quite high and it was a challenge to receive a high grade. Carrie proved readiness to learn and an ability to intellectually engage the scrutinized materials, as well as participate in debates and discussions on prevalent historical themes. She managed to finish the course being one of the top learners, and given the fact that she is younger than her peers also proves her intellectual maturity. Her ability to critically approach the puzzles of history was also reflected in her writing.
Thank you.
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'Solid' seems to have no meaning there. I have fixed several other problems. Overall, it seems a little overwritten and could benefit from considerable simplification in language and structure.
- 'Solid' seems to have no meaning there.
- I have fixed several other problems.
- Overall, it seems a little overwritten and could benefit from considerable simplification in language and structure.
- I have fixed the most bothersome.
- In last year’s US History (I) course we covered a numbe r of complex historical concepts.
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'Solid' seems to have no meaning there. I have fixed several other problems.
Overall, it seems a little overwritten and could benefit from considerable simplification in language and structure. I have fixed the most bothersome.
In last year’s US History (I) course we covered a number of complex historical concepts. We had enough time to scrutinize many primary and secondar
Overall, it seems a little overwritten and could benefit from considerable simplification in language and structure. I have fixed the most bothersome.
In last year’s US History (I) course we covered a number of complex historical concepts. We had enough time to scrutinize many primary and secondar
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Thank you Mister Micawber. I'm just wondering if my version would pass as a fairly well written paragraph, or rather as... well, a bad piece of writing.
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