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Christine Christie Posted 3 years ago
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Is this paragraph correct?



"Lucy is such a nice girl.

Often she sees someone loaded with shopping bags, she stands ready to carry one of her bags, and when an old lady or man is afraid of crossing the street, she will hold one of his arms and help him in the crossing."



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Christine Christie Is this paragraph correct? There are problems. The fatal one is the comma splice between "bags" and "she".

  • Christine Christie Is this paragraph correct?
  • There are problems.
  • The fatal one is the comma splice between "bags" and "she".
  • There are unnatural wordings, too.
  • I might make it "Lucy is such a nice girl.
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Christine ChristieIs this paragraph correct?

There are problems. The fatal one is the comma splice between "bags" and "she". There are unnatural wordings, too. I might make it

"Lucy is such a nice girl. When she sees someone loaded with shopping bags, she offers to carry one of the bags, and when an old lady or man is afraid to cross the street, she w

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