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Jenn123 Posted 10 years ago
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Internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist, Cyril shows us his personal side when he takes his “family” on a much needed vacation. Turns out the family has a little magic in their DNA as well.
  

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Jenn123 Internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist [no comma] Cyril shows us his personal side when he takes his “family” on a much needed vacation. It t urns out (that) the family has a little magic in their DNA as well. Your second sentence is OK as is if you're writing in a very informal style, but make the changes above if you need a more formal style.

— CalifJim

  • Jenn123 Internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist [no comma] Cyril shows us his personal side when he takes his “family” on a much needed vacation.
  • It t urns out (that) the family has a little magic in their DNA as well.
  • Your second sentence is OK as is if you're writing in a very informal style, but make the changes above if you need a more formal style.
  • CJ
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Jenn123Internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist [no comma] Cyril shows us his personal side when he takes his “family” on a much needed vacation. It turns out (that) the family has a little magic in their DNA as well.
Your second sentence is OK
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Noted on the feedback, sir.
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I think it should be : An internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist Cyril...
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After some revision:

An internationally acclaimed magician Cyril shows us his personal side when he takes his “family” on a much needed vacation. It turns out that the family has a little magic in their DNA as well.
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You don't need 'An'. If you use it, you need either a comma after 'magician' or commas after both 'magician' and 'Cyril'. r
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Jenn123I think it should be : An internationally acclaimed magician and illusionist Cyril...
I don't. Roles (magician, illusionist) don't need articles.

CJ
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