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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Over-used Commas?

Hi. Do you think the following are correctly written or punctuated?

1. It was work full of emotions and danger, financed by donations, supported by loving hearts.

2. When everyone is happy, when everyone is satisfied with the results, we can go on to the next step.
  

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#1 looks acceptable to me, though if I was writing it I think I would use a dash in place of the first comma. In #2 I would replace both commas with dashes. Otherwise the sentences seem fine.

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  • #1 looks acceptable to me, though if I was writing it I think I would use a dash in place of the first comma.
  • In #2 I would replace both commas with dashes.
  • Otherwise the sentences seem fine.
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#1 looks acceptable to me, though if I was writing it I think I would use a dash in place of the first comma.

In #2 I would replace both commas with dashes.

Otherwise the sentences seem fine.
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Hi. Is this how you said you would punctuate both 1 and 2?

1. It was work full of emotions and danger -- financed by donations, supported by loving hearts.

2. When everyone is happy -- when everyone is satisfied with the results -- we can go on to the next step.
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Hi,

I prefer the versions with commas.

Best wishes, Clive
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Anonymous
Hi. Is this how you said you would punctuate both 1 and 2?

1. It was work full of emotions and danger -- financed by donations, supported by loving hearts.

2. When everyone is happy -- when everyone is satisfied with the results -- we can go on to the next step.


Yes, that's right.
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