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Jesse310 Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing
Out of District elementary school admission letter
Dear Mrs. xxxxx,
I wish to enroll my 5 year old son (Name) to Kindergarten for the next academic year. XXXXX XXXXXX elementary school has always been one of the most reputable schools in LA for many years. My son xxxxx Pre-K in June 2016 at XXXXX Montessori and is eager to see what his new school has to offer.
***How should I add in our story about how we met in Iraq? Deploying together for 15 months (I also did a 12 month tour to Iraq before my wife joined the Army).
Would a picture help? Anything else we should add? We donate to charity, St. Jude, veterans (clothing), and Salvation Army (clothing, shoes, toys, furniture). We would definitely be very involved with the school (donating, fundraising, etc)
My wife and I just closed escrow back in early April, so we missed the lottery for the 2016-17 school year.
Best regards and thanks,
XXXXX
We appreciate all your help. Thanks!
I wish to enroll my 5 year old son (Name) to Kindergarten for the next academic year. XXXXX XXXXXX elementary school has always been one of the most reputable schools in LA for many years. My son xxxxx Pre-K in June 2016 at XXXXX Montessori and is eager to see what his new school has to offer.
***How should I add in our story about how we met in Iraq? Deploying together for 15 months (I also did a 12 month tour to Iraq before my wife joined the Army).
Would a picture help? Anything else we should add? We donate to charity, St. Jude, veterans (clothing), and Salvation Army (clothing, shoes, toys, furniture). We would definitely be very involved with the school (donating, fundraising, etc)
My wife and I just closed escrow back in early April, so we missed the lottery for the 2016-17 school year.
Best regards and thanks,
XXXXX
We appreciate all your help. Thanks!
Top answer
" It is redundant. Choose one of those to say. I think you have good content to add to your letter, and you have a good start.
- " It is redundant.
- Choose one of those to say.
- I think you have good content to add to your letter, and you have a good start.
- Go ahead and write the rest of your letter mentioning the rest of the information you have to add.
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"XXXXX XXXXXX elementary school has always been one of the most reputable schools in LA for many years"
Don't say "always" and "for many years." It is redundant. Choose one of those to say.
I think you have good content to add to your letter, and you have a good start. Go ahead and write the rest of your letter mentioning the rest of the information you have to add. Then, we will
Don't say "always" and "for many years." It is redundant. Choose one of those to say.
I think you have good content to add to your letter, and you have a good start. Go ahead and write the rest of your letter mentioning the rest of the information you have to add. Then, we will
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