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Tuongvan Posted 18 years ago
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organize a trip
Hi teachers,
Could you please edit the following for me?:
Dear colleages,
This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200km away from the city center .Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by Feb.15th ,2008 .
The trip is scheduled to leave for Mui Ne Beach, on July.15, 2008 and come back to the city on March 5th , 2008 .
Thank you in advance
Could you please edit the following for me?:
Dear colleages,
This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200km away from the city center .Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by Feb.15th ,2008 .
The trip is scheduled to leave for Mui Ne Beach, on July.15, 2008 and come back to the city on March 5th , 2008 .
Thank you in advance
Top answer
You have problems with spacing around punctuation, and you have spurious double spaces in a number of places. I have corrected these below. The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.
- You have problems with spacing around punctuation, and you have spurious double spaces in a number of places.
- I have corrected these below.
- The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.
- Dear colleagues , This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200 km away ["away" is not necessarily wrong, but I think the sentence reads better without it] from the city center.
- Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by February 15 , 2008.
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You have problems with spacing around punctuation, and you have spurious double spaces in a number of places. I have corrected these below.
The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.
Dear colleagues,
This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees
The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.
Dear colleagues,
This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees
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