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Goronsky Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Opinion Needed, Folks

Wanted to run something by you. For clarity, minus all the cumbersome punctuation of commas and semicolons, is my example below workable? The USPS does not use a comma between a city and a two-letter state postal abbreviation. Take a peek below and let me know if this 'could' pass muster. Which, honestly, would you opt for—one or two below?
You have to admit my first version is cleaner and more readable. Mr Micawber, I'd love your opinion too, sir.

***And would you place semicolons instead of commas after each two-letter state abbreviation?

1. This:
Arrested were Mike Smith (50) of Syracuse NY, Dave Draper (41) of Sarasota, FL, and Connie Valasquez (63) of Lansing MI.

2. Instead of this:
Arrested were Mike Smith, 50, of Syracuse, New York; Dave Draper, 41, of Sarasota, Florida; and Connie Valasquez, 63, of Lansing, Michigan.
  

Top answer

For a short piece of information such as an age, I would find commas less distracting than brackets. You could still retain form one:- Arrested were Mike Smith, 50, of Syracuse NY, Dave Draper, 41, of Sarasota, FL, and Connie Valasquez, 63, of Lansing MI. d

  • For a short piece of information such as an age, I would find commas less distracting than brackets.
  • You could still retain form one:- Arrested were Mike Smith, 50, of Syracuse NY, Dave Draper, 41, of Sarasota, FL, and Connie Valasquez, 63, of Lansing MI.
  • d
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For a short piece of information such as an age, I would find commas less distracting than brackets.

You could still retain form one:-

Arrested were Mike Smith, 50, of Syracuse NY, Dave Draper, 41, of Sarasota, FL, and Connie Valasquez, 63, of Lansing MI.

d

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