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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Oneself - finishing a paper

the sentence goes like this:

"Simply stated, “The Point” reassures, entertains, and uplifts its audience, regardless of age, that we all have a purpose or point, even if it is not immediately visible or tangible to the general public or to oneself."

admittedly, it too wieldy in its current form. i'm still working with it. HELP!!! thanks.
  

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" One problem is that the verb 'reassures' is too far away from its object. Another problem is that you are trying to talk about too many people, ie the audience, the general public and oneself. I'd simplify that.

— Clive

  • " One problem is that the verb 'reassures' is too far away from its object.
  • Another problem is that you are trying to talk about too many people, ie the audience, the general public and oneself.
  • I'd simplify that.
  • I suggest something like this.
  • "Simply stated, “The Point” entertains and uplifts its audience, regardless of age.
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Hi,

"Simply stated, “The Point” reassures, entertains, and uplifts its audience, regardless of age, that we all have a purpose or point, even if it is not immediately visible or tangible to the general public or to oneself."

One problem is that the verb 'reassures' is too far away from its object.

Another problem is that you are trying to talk about too many people, ie
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