0
Fandorin Posted 16 years ago
Vocabulary
One sentence that describes the weather
Hi there, guys. I composed a sentence and I would really appreciate it if you correct me. Thank in advance. 
I woke up today and realised that all of what was going on outside reminded me of the tale from my childhood and when I peeked at the windowsill I found it snowbound/covered with snow up to half of the window.
I woke up today and realised that all of what was going on outside reminded me of the tale from my childhood and when I peeked at the windowsill I found it snowbound/covered with snow up to half of the window.
Top answer
What you've written is intelligible and largely grammatical but it isn't very elegant in my opinion. Saying that you "realised" you were reminded of something seems redundant, "all of what was going on outside" does not seem a very natural way of referring to the weather, and "the tale" also seems a bit of an odd insertion. The "windowsill" -- the bottom part of the frame of the window -- is not a likely thing to peek at when one is assessing the weather.
- What you've written is intelligible and largely grammatical but it isn't very elegant in my opinion.
- Saying that you "realised" you were reminded of something seems redundant, "all of what was going on outside" does not seem a very natural way of referring to the weather, and "the tale" also seems a bit of an odd insertion.
- The "windowsill" -- the bottom part of the frame of the window -- is not a likely thing to peek at when one is assessing the weather.
- When I woke up today, the weather reminded me of my childhood.
- I peeked outside to find the snow reaching halfway up the window.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
2 Answers
0
What you've written is intelligible and largely grammatical but it isn't very elegant in my opinion. Saying that you "realised" you were reminded of something seems redundant, "all of what was going on outside" does not seem a very natural way of referring to the weather, and "the tale" also seems a bit of an odd insertion. The "windowsill" -- the bottom part of the frame of the window -- is not
00
Related Questions