One Sentence--Grammar

It is redundant to add the word "when",the original one is more natural.

Hi,

In swimming, degree of body? rotation will change (lessen) at high speeds, particularly all-out sprint speeds because there is so litttle time between strokes at a high tempo. Long distance will generally use more rotation, both breathing and non-breathing.

Would it be clearer and more correct to include 'when' after both?

It wouldn't be correct.

The way it's written, it sounds as if there are concepts of "breathing rotation" and "non-breathing rotation". If that wasn't the intention then some tweaking would be beneficial. You can't just insert "when" because "when ... non-breathing" won't work. Maybe "both when breathing and when between breaths"? I have a feeling there ought to be a better way of saying this, but right now it eludes me.

CliveIn other words, breathing and non-breathing are used here as adjectives.

Oh, right. So there are concepts of "breathing rotation" and "non-breathing rotation"?

CliveLong distance will generally use more rotation, both when breathing in rotation and not breathing in rotation.

To me, that sounds like a breathing r

Thanks, Clive

So it modifies roation?

Long distance will generally use more roation, both breath roation and non-breathing rotation.

Would this be preferred?

Long distance will generally use more breath roation and non-breath rotation.

Hi,

I know about these things because I swim a lot.



“Long distance (swimming) will generally use more

Mr WordyOh, right. So there are concepts of "breathing rotation" and "non-breathing rotation"?

That's what confused me also, Mr Wordy. I was unaware of these terms.

I can find zero Google hits for "non-breathing rotation"...

CliveI know about these things because I swim a lot.

In that case, Clive, I defer to you in all matters relating to this thread.

Hi,



Yeah, but I had to add a PS.



Clive