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Gross profit in our current journal range is lower than that of X's journal's gross profit.

Gross profit in our current journal range is lower than that of X's range.

Gross profit in our current journal range is lower than X's range.

Gross profit in our current journal range is lower than what X make with their journal range.

Which do you like and which are incorrect, if any?

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BarbaraPA · Accepted Answer

I can't comment because I don't understand "journal range." Can you explain that, and then I can give you a better opinion?

English 1b3 · Answer

Sure can.

When I mean journal I mean notebook... a range of journals that a business sells

BarbaraPA · Answer

Ah, so the company sells these journals/notebooks?

What do you mean by range? Do you mean product line?

English 1b3 · Answer

Yes, that's it. They sell them, the product line/range of journals/notebooks.

BarbaraPA · Answer

Gross profits for our current journal product line is lower than that of our X line.
Our current journal product line has lower gross profits than our X line.

English 1b3 · Answer

Grammar GeekGross profits for our current journal product line is lower than ~~that of~~ our X line.Our current journal product line has lower gross profits than that of our X line.

Hi,

Would you accept these variations of your two?

Thanks

English 1b3 · Answer

Grammar GeekGross profits for our current journal product line is lower than that of our X line.Our current journal product line has lower gross profits than our X line.

Can you also please tell me why you chose to leave out 'that of' in the second? Is the reason something to do with grammar, style, or did you just want to show another variation?

Thanks

BarbaraPA · Answer

... than does our X line.
... than our X line does.
... than that of our X line.
but not ... than our X line.

(Not for me. Others may accept it.)

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